for Amalia4/6/2004 c1 
16grim'alkin
wow! i commend you! great poem and, i think its a great example to support the phrase: NO ONE IS PERFECT. good job!
16grim'alkinwow! i commend you! great poem and, i think its a great example to support the phrase: NO ONE IS PERFECT. good job!
7/11/2003 c1 34Protege
This is a rather unique poem. I can definitely see how the ideas came about. I think also that your similes are beautiful, and the punchline is quite effective. However, I think that it is rather disjointed,which, although perhaps making the punchline more effective, does nothing for the poem...I think it would have been just as effective, actually, it you had the poem only as it was in the last verse... Hope that helps...
34ProtegeThis is a rather unique poem. I can definitely see how the ideas came about. I think also that your similes are beautiful, and the punchline is quite effective. However, I think that it is rather disjointed,which, although perhaps making the punchline more effective, does nothing for the poem...I think it would have been just as effective, actually, it you had the poem only as it was in the last verse... Hope that helps...
2/28/2002 c1 1Nuriko No Tenshi
Very nice poem. Everything sounds perfect until the end. It just shows that nothing on the outside is as it seems. Her heart is as cold as ice, but her outward beauty betrays all that. It is a very beautiful poem, so write more poetry soon because poems tell us of life, death, passion, all the ways of living.
~nUrIKo nO tEnSHi~
1Nuriko No TenshiVery nice poem. Everything sounds perfect until the end. It just shows that nothing on the outside is as it seems. Her heart is as cold as ice, but her outward beauty betrays all that. It is a very beautiful poem, so write more poetry soon because poems tell us of life, death, passion, all the ways of living.
~nUrIKo nO tEnSHi~
11/16/2001 c1 SaturnsFirefly to lazy to sign in
Very, very nice. I have something slightly like this only its a love/hate thing. *snickers* For some reason whenever I think of loving somebody but hating them too, I think of Draco and Harry. *shakes head* I've read to many slash stories...
Very, very nice. I have something slightly like this only its a love/hate thing. *snickers* For some reason whenever I think of loving somebody but hating them too, I think of Draco and Harry. *shakes head* I've read to many slash stories...
7/26/2001 c1 43To The Limit
Even though I read it before, I still like it. Try to find more time to right poetry along with your stories. :)
43To The LimitEven though I read it before, I still like it. Try to find more time to right poetry along with your stories. :)
5/23/2001 c1 Zoe
That was great! It sounded totally like either Draco's mom or sister, odes he have one of those? Keep writing on the fire and Ice sequel, Smell ya later!
That was great! It sounded totally like either Draco's mom or sister, odes he have one of those? Keep writing on the fire and Ice sequel, Smell ya later!
5/12/2001 c1 ilene
Liked it, surprising ending.
Liked it, surprising ending.
5/9/2001 c1 Dawn
*applause* I really like the way you twist your plot. You know, like how you talk about something that's perfect and everything, but in the end has a great flaw.
*applause* I really like the way you twist your plot. You know, like how you talk about something that's perfect and everything, but in the end has a great flaw.
4/25/2001 c1 Basil
Intersting peom I liked it.
Intersting peom I liked it.
4/22/2001 c1 106Akira Bane
Rather pretty, I loved how you lead it up to love to hate. Thanks for reviewing Loctus, I'm not sure either but Egyptian, is something like Hebrew and that is one of the main languages of Egypt. I think they post signs in three languages English, Arabic, and Hebrew. Well I gotta go Bye! Pob Hwyl (good luck in Welsh)
106Akira BaneRather pretty, I loved how you lead it up to love to hate. Thanks for reviewing Loctus, I'm not sure either but Egyptian, is something like Hebrew and that is one of the main languages of Egypt. I think they post signs in three languages English, Arabic, and Hebrew. Well I gotta go Bye! Pob Hwyl (good luck in Welsh)