for Special Slave7/9/2009 c8 
1Frail.Wings.Of.Vanity
Good chapter, Gup-chan!
I think the girl is falling for her master. That would sulk
xDD
1Frail.Wings.Of.VanityGood chapter, Gup-chan!
I think the girl is falling for her master. That would sulk
xDD
5/7/2009 c7 3ShredBetty16
ah! I love it! It's a little jumpy at first, but still freaking awesome. write more please. and I'll try to get Midnight Heartbreak up soon, just hang in there, thanks for the reviews :]
3ShredBetty16ah! I love it! It's a little jumpy at first, but still freaking awesome. write more please. and I'll try to get Midnight Heartbreak up soon, just hang in there, thanks for the reviews :]
4/13/2009 c7 2Adis Crow
His brother-interesting. I love the way Michael gets on dear Millael's nerves. And it's intriguing the way you gave both of them angel or angel-esque names. Foreshadowing?
Osprey
2Adis CrowHis brother-interesting. I love the way Michael gets on dear Millael's nerves. And it's intriguing the way you gave both of them angel or angel-esque names. Foreshadowing?
Osprey
4/5/2009 c7 anaa-pixie
ok heres the thing: THIS STORY ROCKS continue writing if its the last thing you do!
ok heres the thing: THIS STORY ROCKS continue writing if its the last thing you do!
12/2/2008 c6 2Adis Crow
I love your writing so much! You have such a wonderful, imaginative style-it sort of reminds me of the dialogue in some mangas I've read.
Osprey
P.S. Are you really from The Netherlands? I've been meaning to ask for awhile.
2Adis CrowI love your writing so much! You have such a wonderful, imaginative style-it sort of reminds me of the dialogue in some mangas I've read.
Osprey
P.S. Are you really from The Netherlands? I've been meaning to ask for awhile.
11/20/2008 c6 Frail.Wings.Of.Vanity
awesome chapter! i think you're writing is improving, keep it up. :3
awesome chapter! i think you're writing is improving, keep it up. :3
10/5/2008 c4 24Jenni Mills
'Teacher takes my hand and brings me to somewhere.'
This is a week sentence, be more specific. Something like 'Teacher takes me to a room with white walls' ... would do the job.
'my sanity disappears'. Dramatic, but it could be a little better. For example 'my sanity slips from me'
Great chapter. The Demon king looks even more evil but the angelic realm looks pathetic - how will the poor little angel cope? I loved the section where she even owns her seperation from the angelic realm by telling them they have no power over her - maybe that will be to her benefit one day?
24Jenni Mills'Teacher takes my hand and brings me to somewhere.'
This is a week sentence, be more specific. Something like 'Teacher takes me to a room with white walls' ... would do the job.
'my sanity disappears'. Dramatic, but it could be a little better. For example 'my sanity slips from me'
Great chapter. The Demon king looks even more evil but the angelic realm looks pathetic - how will the poor little angel cope? I loved the section where she even owns her seperation from the angelic realm by telling them they have no power over her - maybe that will be to her benefit one day?
10/5/2008 c3 Jenni Mills
"You can bring one slave together with you." This sentence is a bit awkward, leave out 'together' and it would make more sense.
Also, I'm a little confused about the pendant. It's hidden between the wings? At the back? I just can't picture this.
But otherwise, a great chapter and I like the implication of a relationship between the two other slaves. Of course I can see where this is heading. I'm a little worried about the theme (submissive female, powerful male). But only because I want you to be a well ajusted person. LOL I'm happy to read about it.
"You can bring one slave together with you." This sentence is a bit awkward, leave out 'together' and it would make more sense.
Also, I'm a little confused about the pendant. It's hidden between the wings? At the back? I just can't picture this.
But otherwise, a great chapter and I like the implication of a relationship between the two other slaves. Of course I can see where this is heading. I'm a little worried about the theme (submissive female, powerful male). But only because I want you to be a well ajusted person. LOL I'm happy to read about it.