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11/2/2011 c1 KrisA16
Aw, so cute! Nice, short and not confusing ;p
3/6/2011 c1 applenica
so simple and to do the point. i like it. it's very very cute ^^
2/7/2011 c1 10balloonfista
Very cute :D

Ri
12/18/2010 c1 9Brolinshipper
Amazing!
10/20/2010 c1 lovescutestories
Aw! So cute! And funny :)

You should write a background story to it! That would awesome! :)

Peace!
3/23/2010 c1 33FLIPPER66
SOMETHING LIKE THIS MUSTA GHAPPENED TO YOU AT ONE TIME SOUNDS AS THOUGH IT MIGHT HAVEW ACTUALLY HAPPENED. LOL
8/4/2009 c1 1wiccaenvy101
Very Nice, Pinkguppie

Look forward to reading more:P

r&r Believe in me

.. Please :D
11/10/2008 c1 DLETE THIS OLD
cute story :D
10/10/2008 c1 49Pinkamoo
Tres cute my friend.

And no. Reviewing isn't hard.

Some people seem to think so x.x

Lovely job =D
10/5/2008 c1 9Lily Llynn
I think this would've been better as a dialogue-only oneshot, but the blurb at the end does make it even cuter/fluffier. (: Cliche, but done nicely. (: Yay to xoxluurve for adding this to our c2.
10/5/2008 c1 JulyPie
Cute! that was very awesome.
10/3/2008 c1 16White Rose Blossom
utterly adorable :)

-Aria
10/3/2008 c1 anon
First, the concept is cute. However, even with a oneshot, it could be improved if you fleshed out the dialogue, making the characters believable. Because you're relying on dialogue, that doesn't mean that you have to tell the audience everything - often being subtle and reading between the lines is more effective.

You talk about the dialogue being confusing - but give your readers some credit. They don't need italics or underlining to realise who's talking; they can follow a conversation. It's just lazy.

You don't need so many exclamation marks! Your dialogue should convey the majority of the emotion making them unnecessary. And when you use them, don't use two.

Please don't think I'm trying to be nasty; this is constructive criticism to help you improve. Having posted so many stories at once I get the impression that you've rushed them rather than putting lots of effort into, and refining, your work. One shots can be just as effective as multi-chapter stories, but only if you polish and rewrite. Often it's harder to use fewer words than more.

Cheers, xx
10/2/2008 c1 x3life
aw =)
9/21/2008 c1 19toffeecakesxox
Aw, that was so cute! I love it! It's the other way around: instead of the guys' obliviousness, it's the girl. OH SO CUTE!

Strawberry xx
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