for Adela's Suicide Note2/18/2013 c1 Fuck that
FUCK THAT
FUCK THAT
3/4/2009 c1 
14improvisationallychallenged
Oh... this is so Lorca...
I did Yerma as part of my A level drama, an you've really got the language style nailed. Especially the bit with Bernarda and the women towards the end.
I can also totally understand the motivation in this piece - while I haven't read the specific play, what Lorca chooses to leave silent can be as stifling as his character's claustrophobic conditions. You really let Adela let rip... I can actually see the act playing out in my head, which is always a good sign when reading a script extract.
Kudos!
14improvisationallychallengedOh... this is so Lorca...
I did Yerma as part of my A level drama, an you've really got the language style nailed. Especially the bit with Bernarda and the women towards the end.
I can also totally understand the motivation in this piece - while I haven't read the specific play, what Lorca chooses to leave silent can be as stifling as his character's claustrophobic conditions. You really let Adela let rip... I can actually see the act playing out in my head, which is always a good sign when reading a script extract.
Kudos!
10/12/2008 c1 8Written
well done! I hadn't read the work in question, but your explanation at the beginning helped me understand the family politics to some degree. it reminded me a bit of another book I read some years back, but i cant remember what it was. maybe something by k. chopin. or maybe thats my imagination running away with me.
interesting how they think that pepe killed her. and really sad. I suppose I cant get as much meaning out of it without having read the play, however. but you do well with it sounding very play-ish and I imagine you continue it's tone successfully. haha. if that made any damn sense.
8Writtenwell done! I hadn't read the work in question, but your explanation at the beginning helped me understand the family politics to some degree. it reminded me a bit of another book I read some years back, but i cant remember what it was. maybe something by k. chopin. or maybe thats my imagination running away with me.
interesting how they think that pepe killed her. and really sad. I suppose I cant get as much meaning out of it without having read the play, however. but you do well with it sounding very play-ish and I imagine you continue it's tone successfully. haha. if that made any damn sense.
9/5/2008 c1 23fatbird33
well written. the intro was very well done, a lot of strong word choices. i loved the end that the candle goes out, VERY dramatic and the slow curtain also makes it so much more powerful. It's amazing what one word could do. If you just had curtain it wouldn't be powerful. WOOT for work cited! nice job
23fatbird33well written. the intro was very well done, a lot of strong word choices. i loved the end that the candle goes out, VERY dramatic and the slow curtain also makes it so much more powerful. It's amazing what one word could do. If you just had curtain it wouldn't be powerful. WOOT for work cited! nice job