for Torn10/5/2008 c1 May Elizabeth
This was wonderful. Though I think this can be continued on, because you've build up the emotion, and I want to know Emily's story, what happened? I do hope you continue writing this. ^^ Peace.
This was wonderful. Though I think this can be continued on, because you've build up the emotion, and I want to know Emily's story, what happened? I do hope you continue writing this. ^^ Peace.
10/4/2008 c2 
3Kristina Suko
Good beginning. It only seems a little odd that she never wondered who he was after he left the first time. She just accepted that he had left without thinking "wait, this guy just came up and kissed me, I don't know him, who is he, why me..." etc.
I'm very eager to read more; I hope you have a new chapter up soon :)
~Maranwe
3Kristina SukoGood beginning. It only seems a little odd that she never wondered who he was after he left the first time. She just accepted that he had left without thinking "wait, this guy just came up and kissed me, I don't know him, who is he, why me..." etc.
I'm very eager to read more; I hope you have a new chapter up soon :)
~Maranwe
10/4/2008 c1 Kristina Suko
Ooh... I am thoroughly hooked! I love the dream sequence, it gave just enough details to draw the reader in, but not enough to satisfy the thirst for more! Well done. I'm curious to see where this goes.
~Maranwe
Ooh... I am thoroughly hooked! I love the dream sequence, it gave just enough details to draw the reader in, but not enough to satisfy the thirst for more! Well done. I'm curious to see where this goes.
~Maranwe
9/4/2008 c2 Eloquent-Marionette
Ohh, the plot thickens. lol I really like it! Stalking hot Vampires? That's always a plus! haha Can't wait to see how this plays out. I can tell it's going to be an awesome story! Keep writing forever and always!
~Davida
Ohh, the plot thickens. lol I really like it! Stalking hot Vampires? That's always a plus! haha Can't wait to see how this plays out. I can tell it's going to be an awesome story! Keep writing forever and always!
~Davida
8/31/2008 c1 Eloquent-Marionette
Wow, very captivating. This kept me on my toes. It's interesting to see how the two different experiences are related. It makes me wonder-Are they the same girl? Or, are they different but related somehow? Good story. Will there be more chapters? (I would love to know where this goes). Keep writing forever and always!
~Davida
Wow, very captivating. This kept me on my toes. It's interesting to see how the two different experiences are related. It makes me wonder-Are they the same girl? Or, are they different but related somehow? Good story. Will there be more chapters? (I would love to know where this goes). Keep writing forever and always!
~Davida