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12/6/2009 c1 10CassandraStacy
This is good. It has a real Pocahontas feel to it. The only thing I would probably change is that when he speaks, don't let US know what he is saying, because Aiyana doesn't know what he's saying and the story is in her POV. I really like the opening paragraphs!

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10/30/2008 c1 AlleluiaElizabeth
Very cute. Loved the descriptions of David and the sails as "ropes attached to the clouds". Leaves you wanting to know more about these two and the encounter that's going to come between their people.

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