for The first times2/2/2009 c3 fleur de l'est
You capture emotions and moments so well! I can relate to this a lot, it's like when someone's hurt you, but you hesitate about whether or not to hurt them back.. It hurts you more when you hurt them. I guess.
Great climax and a sudden fall at the end - breathtaking piece. Keep up the good work =)
~fleur
You capture emotions and moments so well! I can relate to this a lot, it's like when someone's hurt you, but you hesitate about whether or not to hurt them back.. It hurts you more when you hurt them. I guess.
Great climax and a sudden fall at the end - breathtaking piece. Keep up the good work =)
~fleur
1/23/2009 c2 fleur de l'est
Omg o_o I am amazed by this, it was like total love immersion, as I was reading this I had little movies and fantasies playing in my head XD It's incredible.
But I have to say the husband and wife idea at the end seems a bit less romantic than the rest of the poem =_=
Loved it anyway ^^
~fleur x
Omg o_o I am amazed by this, it was like total love immersion, as I was reading this I had little movies and fantasies playing in my head XD It's incredible.
But I have to say the husband and wife idea at the end seems a bit less romantic than the rest of the poem =_=
Loved it anyway ^^
~fleur x
10/22/2008 c1 fleur de l'est
WOW!
I have not read such vivid language in AGES. I love your choice of unusual vocabulary, which really create effective images. Things like "My skin whimpers" and "Fell into a spell, a trance". It's amazing how you can play with your vocabulary, the words you use are like the brightest colours of paint =)
Keep rocking!
~fleur
WOW!
I have not read such vivid language in AGES. I love your choice of unusual vocabulary, which really create effective images. Things like "My skin whimpers" and "Fell into a spell, a trance". It's amazing how you can play with your vocabulary, the words you use are like the brightest colours of paint =)
Keep rocking!
~fleur
9/30/2008 c1 
9Manga Girl Lover
this is such a cute poem! And the way you described the feeling of her reactions to him was very good. :)
9Manga Girl Loverthis is such a cute poem! And the way you described the feeling of her reactions to him was very good. :)
9/7/2008 c1 13Shasta Valentine
how SWEET.
i hope that's what you were going for. Great job, it was so cute and i coud still respect it as great poetry at the same time.
gj, i especially liked the title and theme as well :)
-sv
13Shasta Valentinehow SWEET.
i hope that's what you were going for. Great job, it was so cute and i coud still respect it as great poetry at the same time.
gj, i especially liked the title and theme as well :)
-sv