for Pretending to Breathe5/16/2010 c3 
1XxXMusicSavesMySoulXxX
Oh god, that's so sad! About her boyfriend and all. At first, when she picked up his trash, I honestly thought she was going to dump it all over him, but I like how you made her dump it on his car. That part was epic. xD I can't wait to see his reaction to it. I wonder whats going to happen next :P
1XxXMusicSavesMySoulXxXOh god, that's so sad! About her boyfriend and all. At first, when she picked up his trash, I honestly thought she was going to dump it all over him, but I like how you made her dump it on his car. That part was epic. xD I can't wait to see his reaction to it. I wonder whats going to happen next :P
10/12/2008 c3 bearface
"Dayumn, you go girl!"
The trash and car scene was classic. I want to read more about Jeff. I love the way you sort of draw out the mystery of him. I can't wait to see how you draw out the rest of your story. Awesome job chicka!
"Dayumn, you go girl!"
The trash and car scene was classic. I want to read more about Jeff. I love the way you sort of draw out the mystery of him. I can't wait to see how you draw out the rest of your story. Awesome job chicka!
9/29/2008 c3 5KatieTheWriter
OMG that was amazing! I am in awe of your serious writing skills. So beautiful. And I loved the ending, where Lily threw the trash at Lucas' car! I would do that too, the nerve he had telling her to pick up his trash! What a creep!
Aw, the bottom made me sad. Who is Jeff Barnhart?
I'm going to check out the character photos now. Good job! I can't wait to read more of this!
-Hugs-
Katie
5KatieTheWriterOMG that was amazing! I am in awe of your serious writing skills. So beautiful. And I loved the ending, where Lily threw the trash at Lucas' car! I would do that too, the nerve he had telling her to pick up his trash! What a creep!
Aw, the bottom made me sad. Who is Jeff Barnhart?
I'm going to check out the character photos now. Good job! I can't wait to read more of this!
-Hugs-
Katie
9/29/2008 c2 KatieTheWriter
Wow, you know how to hook a reader Elle! Great job, I'm going to read the first chapter!
Wow, you know how to hook a reader Elle! Great job, I'm going to read the first chapter!
9/27/2008 c2 5only pretending
You've shown a lot of emotion with just a few words. I love it already. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Good work.
5only pretendingYou've shown a lot of emotion with just a few words. I love it already. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Good work.
9/26/2008 c3 8Written
wow, this is really good so far! i don't like the main guy at all so far, but maybe thats the point :) hope you update soon.
8Writtenwow, this is really good so far! i don't like the main guy at all so far, but maybe thats the point :) hope you update soon.
9/17/2008 c3 Haley Jean
YAY! Such a quick update & you definitely didn't fail to deliver!(= But what really surprised me is that you responded! xD I totally love your writing style & the flow of everything. Some parts were a little choppy but everything became clear at the end. I totally didn't know she was a new kid, so yeahh. I was like, "What?" for about a minute. :P
Oh, I don't mean to be a total grammar nerd, but [i think] it should be...
"Perfect; life would certainly never be that way again."
Perfect. Life would certainly never be that way again.
& Can't for another update. OMG, I'm greedy. Bahahahahah.
YAY! Such a quick update & you definitely didn't fail to deliver!(= But what really surprised me is that you responded! xD I totally love your writing style & the flow of everything. Some parts were a little choppy but everything became clear at the end. I totally didn't know she was a new kid, so yeahh. I was like, "What?" for about a minute. :P
Oh, I don't mean to be a total grammar nerd, but [i think] it should be...
"Perfect; life would certainly never be that way again."
Perfect. Life would certainly never be that way again.
& Can't for another update. OMG, I'm greedy. Bahahahahah.
9/14/2008 c1 5KatieTheWriter
I'm looking forward to the first chapter and reading this story. The poem was beautiful! Honestly beautiful.
Good job~
KatieTheWriter :)
5KatieTheWriterI'm looking forward to the first chapter and reading this story. The poem was beautiful! Honestly beautiful.
Good job~
KatieTheWriter :)
9/13/2008 c2 1Katie Saychiadu
This is freaking fabulous. I swear, I can't wait to see what the heck that meant. I have some ideas of what might be going on, but I'm usually wrong, so I'll keep them to myself. Anyway, can't wait to read more!
1Katie SaychiaduThis is freaking fabulous. I swear, I can't wait to see what the heck that meant. I have some ideas of what might be going on, but I'm usually wrong, so I'll keep them to myself. Anyway, can't wait to read more!
9/13/2008 c2 Haley Jean
I think i'm gonna love this story. The prologue sort of confused me. I mean, was her speech really that short? Hahaha, hopefully you update soon! Can't wait to see what happens(;
I think i'm gonna love this story. The prologue sort of confused me. I mean, was her speech really that short? Hahaha, hopefully you update soon! Can't wait to see what happens(;
9/13/2008 c2 il capitano
A really good beginning
Hope the next chapters are longer and more detailed about the upcoming story
Overall really gud story so far
totally kool
update as soon as possible please
thx
A really good beginning
Hope the next chapters are longer and more detailed about the upcoming story
Overall really gud story so far
totally kool
update as soon as possible please
thx