for Faery Night12/31/2008 c1 
5Samantha Biggers
Aw, that's a really sad but good poem. I really liked the fantasy feel of it, not a lot of poems are like that. It's good to find a unique and talented writer! =)
Sammy B.
5Samantha BiggersAw, that's a really sad but good poem. I really liked the fantasy feel of it, not a lot of poems are like that. It's good to find a unique and talented writer! =)
Sammy B.
10/5/2008 c1 3Mouse Mitterand
Hello - this is really beautiful. I'm sure it's just me, but maybe everyone's felt this way at some point? It brought me years and years back though, and I have to say you captured the feeling perfectly. I love the use of light and being not of this world, and that it'd never happen, but that it was still amazing - it really made the one-shot/poem. There's really nothing I don't like about this, unless maybe you would ever want to elaborate on it further? This could easily be a prose piece, and I think it would be even more beautiful as such. You should give it a try!
3Mouse MitterandHello - this is really beautiful. I'm sure it's just me, but maybe everyone's felt this way at some point? It brought me years and years back though, and I have to say you captured the feeling perfectly. I love the use of light and being not of this world, and that it'd never happen, but that it was still amazing - it really made the one-shot/poem. There's really nothing I don't like about this, unless maybe you would ever want to elaborate on it further? This could easily be a prose piece, and I think it would be even more beautiful as such. You should give it a try!
9/16/2008 c1 45deefective
I really like the imagery you created with this piece. The word choice was perfect for this. But what I think could've made this a more emphasized poem would be if you bolded the repeating line or seperated it from the rest. Maybe it's just me, because I like doing things like that but I think it would've made it more clear and pronounced.
45deefectiveI really like the imagery you created with this piece. The word choice was perfect for this. But what I think could've made this a more emphasized poem would be if you bolded the repeating line or seperated it from the rest. Maybe it's just me, because I like doing things like that but I think it would've made it more clear and pronounced.