9/21/2010 c1 179NearlyPrescient
very well done.

the repetition adds a lot to the poem's effect, but I don't think you should be deadset on exact repetition; the language might flow more smoothly if in some of the repetitions, you change something. change 'but' to 'so' or that sort of thing. I have the sixth stanza, in particular, in mind, but I'd think the idea stands for any of them. naturally, it's up to you to feel where it should be the same and where it can maybe differ a little, or even if it should.