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7/9/2009 c1 5CuriousContradiction
I normally am not a fan of rhyme, but I was really impressed by your rhythm in this poem. You made it sound natural instead of forced, the way a lot of people do it. You don't cram words in just so that it would rhyme. It just seemed to flow. One thing I was wondering was if you meant "silvered moons" instead of "slivered moons." Maybe that's just a word I don't know though. You're very good at imagery, you know that? I really liked the lines

thick as snow, black as coals

skies reddish blue and angry gold

stars' smoky gowns

Lovely descriptions! I enjoyed this poem a lot.
1/21/2009 c1 24fairies and snapple
I have no idea why this doesn't have any reviews. I really like it- the rhyming isn't too much, just kinda sing-songy. Some of the phrases are just really lovely, especially the "smoky gowns" and the image of the lonely angels. I also liked the repetition. Just very nice.

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