for Saint10/26/2008 c1 
22crocodile
ahahah. normally i don't go for themes like this, but this was superbly written. you pulled off the sarcasm extremely well. the stanzas flow nicely and all that jazz. overall, this is great.
22crocodileahahah. normally i don't go for themes like this, but this was superbly written. you pulled off the sarcasm extremely well. the stanzas flow nicely and all that jazz. overall, this is great.
9/21/2008 c1 10Zijue
I like the conversational tone of this poem - it seems even more accusatory and pointed, as you're talking directly to this person. Not only that, but I get the sense that the "saint" is justifying themselves, rationalising away their materialism. These justifications come across as excuses in your poem, making their motives seem dubious.
An interesting, well-structured poem.
10ZijueI like the conversational tone of this poem - it seems even more accusatory and pointed, as you're talking directly to this person. Not only that, but I get the sense that the "saint" is justifying themselves, rationalising away their materialism. These justifications come across as excuses in your poem, making their motives seem dubious.
An interesting, well-structured poem.