for Catch of the day6/3/2009 c2 Samuel Harrisson
I have to say that I am extremely impressed with these first two chapters. Seeing the description, I wasn't impressed. It seemed rather...egotistical. I have now come to realize that you deserve all that and then some. Since fictionpress is overrun with crap for writers, this is quite a pleasant surprise! Overall dialogue was great, imagery was fantastic, and we really got to identify with the character, so great job on that! This is a story I think I shall follow till the very end. Congrats, you marked up one more fan!
I have to say that I am extremely impressed with these first two chapters. Seeing the description, I wasn't impressed. It seemed rather...egotistical. I have now come to realize that you deserve all that and then some. Since fictionpress is overrun with crap for writers, this is quite a pleasant surprise! Overall dialogue was great, imagery was fantastic, and we really got to identify with the character, so great job on that! This is a story I think I shall follow till the very end. Congrats, you marked up one more fan!
6/3/2009 c3 
1Lozzii95
Wow, i'm on chapter 3 so far and already enjoying it :)
Can't wait to read the other chapters.
Please read my story :)
Thankyou.
1Lozzii95Wow, i'm on chapter 3 so far and already enjoying it :)
Can't wait to read the other chapters.
Please read my story :)
Thankyou.
6/2/2009 c11 Caro
Oh, my gosh, i love this story! I cannot wait to (a) read the next chapter and (b) read your book.
xoxo,
Caro
Oh, my gosh, i love this story! I cannot wait to (a) read the next chapter and (b) read your book.
xoxo,
Caro
5/27/2009 c9 Caro
I love this story... and i'm so excited for your new book. I cant wait to read it!
I love this story... and i'm so excited for your new book. I cant wait to read it!
4/14/2009 c6 Tilly Tah Tah
I don't really think I'm the first to compliment you on your writing and tell you how talented you are. But I will anyway. I'm very happy with the way you explain emotions in so few words that makes you either smile or clench your stomach when you read it.
I look forward to read the next update, and I've also just read your "The Broken Road." Liked it very much.
anyway, like I said, I'm happily awaiting your updates and congratulations for becoming a published author! It must be a real dream-come-true! I know it would for me! :)
Keep up the good work and know that you've attained another fan.
Bye!
I don't really think I'm the first to compliment you on your writing and tell you how talented you are. But I will anyway. I'm very happy with the way you explain emotions in so few words that makes you either smile or clench your stomach when you read it.
I look forward to read the next update, and I've also just read your "The Broken Road." Liked it very much.
anyway, like I said, I'm happily awaiting your updates and congratulations for becoming a published author! It must be a real dream-come-true! I know it would for me! :)
Keep up the good work and know that you've attained another fan.
Bye!
2/11/2009 c5 adders721
So yeah I really like this story and I can't wait to read more of it. I though it was funny how the dad figured out why she had hidden!
Adders
So yeah I really like this story and I can't wait to read more of it. I though it was funny how the dad figured out why she had hidden!
Adders
2/5/2009 c4 Chelsey
This is good so far. I just wish the chapters were longer! haha Crista is strong and funny. "Sperm donor"... XD cracked me up.
This is good so far. I just wish the chapters were longer! haha Crista is strong and funny. "Sperm donor"... XD cracked me up.
1/31/2009 c1 Burnt Paper
wow this is really intresting
i seriously cant wait for more!
please update...
...soon!
wow this is really intresting
i seriously cant wait for more!
please update...
...soon!
11/22/2008 c3 wookborm
lol, this is great.
update soon, please?
maybe if she turns on the waterworks, her dad will cave and let her stay?
lol, this is great.
update soon, please?
maybe if she turns on the waterworks, her dad will cave and let her stay?
11/21/2008 c3 5inkspatters
Wow! This is really good, I wish I could help you promote Prada, but I don't really have any web pages of my own...My myspace is kinda dead. But woohoo for it being on amazon! You must be so excited.
Anyway, I like how Cole's like this completely mute hottie, it's so funny. Oh and the last lines were brilliance :D
5inkspattersWow! This is really good, I wish I could help you promote Prada, but I don't really have any web pages of my own...My myspace is kinda dead. But woohoo for it being on amazon! You must be so excited.
Anyway, I like how Cole's like this completely mute hottie, it's so funny. Oh and the last lines were brilliance :D
10/30/2008 c2 Sara Jivanjee
I like this, the story is set up well in two short chapters and it's very cute. I got a good sense of Alaska from your description in the first chapter (though I think she shivered more than once, so you may want to change one of them) and I like Crista and her Orlando Bloom already. Very cute! I also like the tension between Crista and her dad. I want to read more. I hope this gets published. Congrats on your upcoming book!
I like this, the story is set up well in two short chapters and it's very cute. I got a good sense of Alaska from your description in the first chapter (though I think she shivered more than once, so you may want to change one of them) and I like Crista and her Orlando Bloom already. Very cute! I also like the tension between Crista and her dad. I want to read more. I hope this gets published. Congrats on your upcoming book!
10/19/2008 c2 inkspatters
Review Marathon! Take a look at the link in my profile.
This is just as good as the first chapter. I really like your dialogue because it's so strong and interesting to read and you always put actions after speech which makes your story flow really well. I thought that the confrontation between her and her father was particularly well done.
The characterisation was also great and allowed me to follow the story very easily, and a lot of that was achieved through the dialogue. I like how you've found her an Orland-Bloom look alike because we immediately form an expectation for him to be charming and then he isn't, which just makes everything so much more interesting. You've also established your heroine as a strong girl in this chapter 'I hated to be the damsel in distress'.
All in all I'm very interested to see what you've got in store for the next chapter. This is great!
Review Marathon! Take a look at the link in my profile.
This is just as good as the first chapter. I really like your dialogue because it's so strong and interesting to read and you always put actions after speech which makes your story flow really well. I thought that the confrontation between her and her father was particularly well done.
The characterisation was also great and allowed me to follow the story very easily, and a lot of that was achieved through the dialogue. I like how you've found her an Orland-Bloom look alike because we immediately form an expectation for him to be charming and then he isn't, which just makes everything so much more interesting. You've also established your heroine as a strong girl in this chapter 'I hated to be the damsel in distress'.
All in all I'm very interested to see what you've got in store for the next chapter. This is great!
10/17/2008 c1 inkspatters
Prada and Prejudice sounds great. You must have put a lot of time into researching Austen-era language and history to be able to pull it off, but I'm sure it's wonderful. I'm a little Austen obsessed, so I'll be sure to get myself a copy of Prada and Prejudice.
Anyway, Catch of the Day sounds pretty good too. I don't really have any criticism for you. Good grammar, spelling etc. Writing with a good flow, interesting plot so far. Basically, I like it :D
Good job Mandy and congrats on getting published!
Prada and Prejudice sounds great. You must have put a lot of time into researching Austen-era language and history to be able to pull it off, but I'm sure it's wonderful. I'm a little Austen obsessed, so I'll be sure to get myself a copy of Prada and Prejudice.
Anyway, Catch of the Day sounds pretty good too. I don't really have any criticism for you. Good grammar, spelling etc. Writing with a good flow, interesting plot so far. Basically, I like it :D
Good job Mandy and congrats on getting published!
10/10/2008 c2 The Concept of Breathing
cole sounds yummy...continue please! As for Crista's dad, I want to know why he left all those years ago, it couldn't just be because he wanted to go fishing in Alaska.
Post soon!
cole sounds yummy...continue please! As for Crista's dad, I want to know why he left all those years ago, it couldn't just be because he wanted to go fishing in Alaska.
Post soon!