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10/18/2008 c1 Fractured Illusion
"Am I suppose to call the police?"

- *supposed*

The story doesn't end in a surprising way. In fact, it was apparent who the murderer was from the start. If you added more suspense/mystery the effect would be greater, i think. Just a thought.

- Frac, from the Review marathon (link in profile)
9/30/2008 c1 Frozen.by.Sloth
okay. So... This was weird. :)

I loved it. I loved how you wrote it. It was to the point, a bit detached, which helped relate to the narrator. Actually, I'm quite awestruck.

Great job.

p.s. I could totally relate in the ultimate way, even if this was kinda.. final.

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