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11/1/2009 c1 Icyfire4w5
1) "My hands moved with a life of their;"

(Um, I might be wrong, but I assume that you've intended to type "their own".)

2) I think that you've chosen the perfect POV for this story. (1st person POV=Heightened horror)

3) Emily is so young, yet so cunning. Argh, her life has ended too soon.
1/7/2009 c1 9Narq
CREEPY! OMG, I had goosebumps crawling all over me! It was such a scary story... no, not scary, just... creepy? ;)

Narq.

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