for All that Glitters12/5/2020 c1 Otakuami
The imagery used. her is very appealing and beautiful. I could almost see the expressions and hear the emotions., scorn and bitterness in her voice and absolute ignorance from the man's side. I believe the title is a lesson for the pretty lady.
The imagery used. her is very appealing and beautiful. I could almost see the expressions and hear the emotions., scorn and bitterness in her voice and absolute ignorance from the man's side. I believe the title is a lesson for the pretty lady.
10/16/2012 c1 
1Snicker N. Wraith
That's really quite beautiful. I don't have much I can think of other than that, my mind's still caught up in pearls and Venice and dark water and rose-scented songs and the gondolier... The story has this kind of beautiful, melancholy, magical weight to it. It's really stunning, definitely a fave.
1Snicker N. WraithThat's really quite beautiful. I don't have much I can think of other than that, my mind's still caught up in pearls and Venice and dark water and rose-scented songs and the gondolier... The story has this kind of beautiful, melancholy, magical weight to it. It's really stunning, definitely a fave.
1/24/2010 c1 30sophiesix
beautiful, beautiful descriptions. a couple of times, there was a bit of a run-on use of adjective-noun format, but it didn't last long, and was swamped by the wonderfulness of the other descriptions anyway :)
"No – I mean to be a good little girl and live on gold. What do I care for love" lol! love the first bit. the second sentence might sound more aristocratic as 'What care I for love", but then maybe she's not putting on her aristocratic airs and graces yet.
Loved the bit at the end with the peek into her future, the hardening of her heart. nice!
30sophiesixbeautiful, beautiful descriptions. a couple of times, there was a bit of a run-on use of adjective-noun format, but it didn't last long, and was swamped by the wonderfulness of the other descriptions anyway :)
"No – I mean to be a good little girl and live on gold. What do I care for love" lol! love the first bit. the second sentence might sound more aristocratic as 'What care I for love", but then maybe she's not putting on her aristocratic airs and graces yet.
Loved the bit at the end with the peek into her future, the hardening of her heart. nice!
12/21/2009 c1 queenshinko
That was beautiful. Full of VERY powerful imagery
That was beautiful. Full of VERY powerful imagery
4/14/2009 c1 10closetninety
At first, I sort of sympathized with the girl.
She seemed a bit naive and really pretty,
like a princess type. But then I got to the part
about how the old man only smiles for her,
and I sort of forgave it all.
10closetninetyAt first, I sort of sympathized with the girl.
She seemed a bit naive and really pretty,
like a princess type. But then I got to the part
about how the old man only smiles for her,
and I sort of forgave it all.
3/30/2009 c1 15R. M. Kent
Loved it, the descriptions were beautiful and the characters very vivid, and I enjoyed it so much!
15R. M. KentLoved it, the descriptions were beautiful and the characters very vivid, and I enjoyed it so much!
1/4/2009 c1 1Jessie My Love
This was beautifully written. I just loved your use of imagery. You described the characters flawlessly. It just really showed how pointless beauty can be.
You said it was random, but I still think it was good~
• Jessie my l o v e
p.s. pay it forward
1Jessie My LoveThis was beautifully written. I just loved your use of imagery. You described the characters flawlessly. It just really showed how pointless beauty can be.
You said it was random, but I still think it was good~
• Jessie my l o v e
p.s. pay it forward
12/27/2008 c1 13Nicki BluIs
I found it interesting that these two people were defined in terms of phyiscal beauty. In fact everything in this piece was define in terms of beauty. I don't know if that was your intention but it gave the piece a shallow tone.It felt as if the man's only fault was being ugly and old. There was no indication that he was cruel to her. Likewise i t seemed the girls only quality was being beautiful. I was clear that she was neither sweet, nor gentle. If that was your intent it was conveyed wonderfully.
The imagery was good however I felt it was too much. After a while it seemed to be interrupting the flow of the story. However it does contribute greatly to the tone so perhaps it should stay as is.
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13Nicki BluIsI found it interesting that these two people were defined in terms of phyiscal beauty. In fact everything in this piece was define in terms of beauty. I don't know if that was your intention but it gave the piece a shallow tone.It felt as if the man's only fault was being ugly and old. There was no indication that he was cruel to her. Likewise i t seemed the girls only quality was being beautiful. I was clear that she was neither sweet, nor gentle. If that was your intent it was conveyed wonderfully.
The imagery was good however I felt it was too much. After a while it seemed to be interrupting the flow of the story. However it does contribute greatly to the tone so perhaps it should stay as is.
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11/17/2008 c1 20Twilight Starr
It was an interesting story. I liked the flashbacks, the summary, and the wonderful shortness of it. Nice work. =]
~Twilight Starr
20Twilight StarrIt was an interesting story. I liked the flashbacks, the summary, and the wonderful shortness of it. Nice work. =]
~Twilight Starr
11/15/2008 c1 65noebody
it was really good, nicely well-written! oh and the first line really caught my attention good job.
65noebodyit was really good, nicely well-written! oh and the first line really caught my attention good job.
11/1/2008 c1 146Sexy Vampirechick
He is fat and old and ugly. She is slim and pretty and young.
I think the repetitive and wasn't necessary. Should be He's fat,old and ugly. Same with the next one.
I liked the many adjectives you used to describe the scenery.It gives the reader a much better image of the site.
One thing I disliked is that you kept on repeating some of the stuff over and over only using different words and that was quite annoying.
146Sexy VampirechickHe is fat and old and ugly. She is slim and pretty and young.
I think the repetitive and wasn't necessary. Should be He's fat,old and ugly. Same with the next one.
I liked the many adjectives you used to describe the scenery.It gives the reader a much better image of the site.
One thing I disliked is that you kept on repeating some of the stuff over and over only using different words and that was quite annoying.
9/28/2008 c1 3Alexis Grey
I had a rather large and detailed review written for this, until my technological ineptitude meant that I lost it. Drat.
Well anyway, here are some of the bits I remember writing:
"Seamless perfection." Pardon me, but is that a pun? Anyway, it implies that she is manufactured and artificial rather than authentic. Whilst she is seemingly perfect, she is truly anything but. Alas, the craftsmanship of the facade is exquisite and undetectable.
"Serenissima"... just where do you come by such fantastic, wonderful, enticing general knowledge? I must admit that there is a hint of the green eyed monster in me, as ashamed as I am to so envy a cyber stranger lol.
I found myself as suitably impressed, or perhaps more so, than I was envious. Flawless, detailed description set the scene and truly conveyed the beauty in the mirror crack'd.
Kudos,
Alexis
3Alexis GreyI had a rather large and detailed review written for this, until my technological ineptitude meant that I lost it. Drat.
Well anyway, here are some of the bits I remember writing:
"Seamless perfection." Pardon me, but is that a pun? Anyway, it implies that she is manufactured and artificial rather than authentic. Whilst she is seemingly perfect, she is truly anything but. Alas, the craftsmanship of the facade is exquisite and undetectable.
"Serenissima"... just where do you come by such fantastic, wonderful, enticing general knowledge? I must admit that there is a hint of the green eyed monster in me, as ashamed as I am to so envy a cyber stranger lol.
I found myself as suitably impressed, or perhaps more so, than I was envious. Flawless, detailed description set the scene and truly conveyed the beauty in the mirror crack'd.
Kudos,
Alexis