for Merely Child's Play4/4/2011 c1 Fiercely Me
I can't describe how this drabble makes me feel. It's almost melancholic.
I never considered how the flower would feel. It really makes you think.
I do adore this. I think I'll favorite it. Well done!
I can't describe how this drabble makes me feel. It's almost melancholic.
I never considered how the flower would feel. It really makes you think.
I do adore this. I think I'll favorite it. Well done!
7/25/2009 c1 Xx-Angel-of-Shadows-xX
Sad, but happy at the same time. Very bittersweet.
It's strange how you managed to convey so much emotions in so few words, and I congratulate you for it. It was very well done.
Yours from the Roadhouse,
~Star~
Sad, but happy at the same time. Very bittersweet.
It's strange how you managed to convey so much emotions in so few words, and I congratulate you for it. It was very well done.
Yours from the Roadhouse,
~Star~
7/18/2009 c1 
26Mirabella
I never realised how the poor flower felt! :)
Really well written, instant favourite! :)
26MirabellaI never realised how the poor flower felt! :)
Really well written, instant favourite! :)
3/21/2009 c1 FuckMeAlice
This was a really beautiful drabble. First of all, I like the concept of it; taking something familiar and then adding deeper meaning to it.
I'm not sure, however, if I like the phrase 'toiled and toiled'. Seems a little redundant to me. Perhaps you could change one of the 'toiled's for something different?
-Stardust.
This was a really beautiful drabble. First of all, I like the concept of it; taking something familiar and then adding deeper meaning to it.
I'm not sure, however, if I like the phrase 'toiled and toiled'. Seems a little redundant to me. Perhaps you could change one of the 'toiled's for something different?
-Stardust.
1/23/2009 c1 6concerto49
It was a nice extended metaphor - emotional too. Short, but makes quite a scene.
6concerto49It was a nice extended metaphor - emotional too. Short, but makes quite a scene.
12/11/2008 c1 14Thoughtful Silence
I actually really liked this. For drabble, it's quite... well, meaningful. Call me a bit pretentious, but I love how the daisy seems to represent this concept of love and beauty, and how it is being destroyed by an unknowing girl. The girl too seems to represent naivety, lost in day-dreams of a perfect love taken right outta a Jane Austin novel. Your story has a very... poetic feel to it, which I loved.
Anyways, really good job on this. Keep it up.
- Silence.
14Thoughtful SilenceI actually really liked this. For drabble, it's quite... well, meaningful. Call me a bit pretentious, but I love how the daisy seems to represent this concept of love and beauty, and how it is being destroyed by an unknowing girl. The girl too seems to represent naivety, lost in day-dreams of a perfect love taken right outta a Jane Austin novel. Your story has a very... poetic feel to it, which I loved.
Anyways, really good job on this. Keep it up.
- Silence.
10/3/2008 c1 Daggerstone
Like it - would love it as a full-blown story, though I admit it's harder to write it in 100 words than 10 times as much.
Reminded me of Wilde's "The Nightingale and the Rose". We're all cruel when in love, even if unintentionally.
Like it - would love it as a full-blown story, though I admit it's harder to write it in 100 words than 10 times as much.
Reminded me of Wilde's "The Nightingale and the Rose". We're all cruel when in love, even if unintentionally.
10/2/2008 c1 10Caecilia
I really really like this. I don't know if I'd read it if you had a full story behind it, but I'm glad there's at least a drabble from it.
I love the last line. It's sad, but it paints a rather beautiful picture in my mind.
Good writing.
~Caecilia, the Roadhouse
10CaeciliaI really really like this. I don't know if I'd read it if you had a full story behind it, but I'm glad there's at least a drabble from it.
I love the last line. It's sad, but it paints a rather beautiful picture in my mind.
Good writing.
~Caecilia, the Roadhouse
10/1/2008 c1 1TorMentor
I started out with a "sigh...another one that starts out this way"-feeling, but showing the typical plucking-event from the stance of the flower was a nice thought, and it worked well, since I do feel sorry for the little flower.
Death to the child! :p
1TorMentorI started out with a "sigh...another one that starts out this way"-feeling, but showing the typical plucking-event from the stance of the flower was a nice thought, and it worked well, since I do feel sorry for the little flower.
Death to the child! :p