for Drip10/18/2008 c1 Fractured Illusion
I liked this better than Silence, actually. for one, the surprise wasnt the core element of the story here. And the surprise wasnt as obvious either :)
Showing the aftermath was a good idea, I think. I like that in some way, he is feeling guilty about what he did. In Silence, he seemed so hollow and guilt-free, but here he is more human. That's good :)
- Frac, from the Review Marathon (link in my profile)
I liked this better than Silence, actually. for one, the surprise wasnt the core element of the story here. And the surprise wasnt as obvious either :)
Showing the aftermath was a good idea, I think. I like that in some way, he is feeling guilty about what he did. In Silence, he seemed so hollow and guilt-free, but here he is more human. That's good :)
- Frac, from the Review Marathon (link in my profile)
9/30/2008 c1 Frozen.by.Sloth
okay, so... This one was even weirder.
I actually didn't like the transition to the new people, it was written in the marginally same way, but I don't think it suits looking from the outside in.
Though, I loved this one also. The 'hahaha's kinda freaked me out but I liked it. :)
okay, so... This one was even weirder.
I actually didn't like the transition to the new people, it was written in the marginally same way, but I don't think it suits looking from the outside in.
Though, I loved this one also. The 'hahaha's kinda freaked me out but I liked it. :)