9/5/2009 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
I loved (if I may steal your phrase) the boldness of this. Who else, but you, would say they choose the ocean, because their bold like that…?

Imagery was top notch, and you presented valid reasoning and responsive to your theory. You idealize the whale; it becomes almost a mythical god-like creature. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.

Jules, via the Review Marathon (links in my profile)

12/28/2008 c1 103Jesse the Storyteller
Not to be scientific and logical, but... "and breathing what you cannot breathe"... while I love this line for its beauty, whales breathe oxygen like us. They have to consistently come up for air. Hahaha.

The last three lines are kind of overdramatic, I think. Usually stuff like this works in your other poems with its complexity and beauty. But here it seems overdramatic - maybe because you're overdoing the emotions in this poem a little bit too much.

However, I love these lines: "Just so you know, if it comes to choosing sides, / I choose the ocean." They are beautiful and I want to write them on the sidewalk of my college. :P

All of your poetry is fabulous. You are a gift to the world and I'm happy to have met you.

-Jesse

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11/1/2008 c1 10winteria
...wow. I don't even know what to say.

I love this piece. Every line just draws me in and I drown in it. What a way to understate everything.

Beautiful.

10/8/2008 c1 29Leaves of Labefaction
It's really good. I won't say it's perfect, it's a bit weak in the beginning, but the last three lines are really breathtaking. I want to keep them forever...

-LoL

9/30/2008 c1 194Aslan Israel
I would like to be miles below you,

deeper than your mind can comprehend,

and breathing what you cannot breathe.



Those lines are just beautiful... really. And the way you pull everything together in those last two lines is perfect.

9/28/2008 c1 Isca
"I have resurfaced, just to see your face." AWW! *tear* that's so beautiful! :D