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11/28/2010 c1 Felicity J. Morgan
I quite enjoyed this, even if it was a little short. The ending, in particular, was quite striking.

I'd have preferred a better narrative from the boy. It felt like the abuse he suffered wasn't real because there was no real detailed description of how he felt. You also have a habit of telling, rather than showing.

I probably wouldn't place this under the horror category either. Probably fits better elsewhere.

Overall though, pretty touching (:
7/23/2010 c1 7Liya Smith
This was...great.. Dude, this was incredibly well written! I'm surprised you don't have like a ton of reviews on this. I loved the ending and I felt grief for the poor kid. I also felt annoyed for the mom for being so oblivious! If I was that kid I'd call the cops on that sonuva-

Anyway, great read! :)
4/19/2010 c1 2FantasyRose
Beautifully written. I'm particularly fond of; 'Even I, who had been through hell at the hands of this man, would not deny him his dieing words.' I loved it, and you covered the aspects of child abuse; but in a way I've never seen before. Props to you my friend, props to you.

~Fantasy
12/27/2009 c1 128vitriolicvermilion
This is very believable, almost like an autobiographical work.

It's also very sad; you've covered the topic of child abuse very well.

The ending is unique; I liked how you didn't just end it with "child is beaten, child dies, omg so sad" and instead gave it a thoughtful plot all the way through.

Most of all though, I loved the idea of the last line and how it tied into the title.

Fantastic job. (:
12/21/2009 c1 1Sacred Burning
'Kay:) This story is sad:(, but greatly written:)!
10/5/2008 c1 2Underground Solitary
This was wonderfully written. It captured the innocence and trusting of a child, and how easily it could be ripped apart. How one mistake can change not only one life, but others. I love how you potrayed this in such a way that the fantasy of heaven had been ruined. Though I somehow doubt his father would end up Heaven (well, God forgives all, but.) I see why he would be scared of such a Heaven.

Great job. Keep it up.

Signed,

Her Tragedy.
10/3/2008 c1 nicolemegannn
I like it, its really good, a little sad but i like it. more soon please.

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