for I'll find you again8/29/2010 c1 
8Nightmaresbeasti'monlyhuman
Lovely~!
I just re-read this and wow~ You've made my heart ache my older sister~ Just WOW~!
8Nightmaresbeasti'monlyhumanLovely~!
I just re-read this and wow~ You've made my heart ache my older sister~ Just WOW~!
3/24/2009 c1 6Kalista Jia
Interesting intro... with the fog, glass and everything. The idea of the girl stand there with lifeless eyes certainly is intriguing. It is quite angsty~!
"Suddenly, her face changed. The smile was gone. Her eyes shone with rage, her gaze never leaving my face. I saw a small movement of her lips- first they were just slightly opening, just to be replaced with what looked like as if she was screaming. Her voice never reached me, but what she was saying-or, rather… mouthing- was painfully clear to me. She was just repeating that one word- ‘why’." (Very nice)
I did get a little confuse at the setting at first... but it clarifies more and more at the end. Just a question... is the narrator a girl? (just curious) because you said.. " ‘Stupid little girl, am I not?’" Or did I misunderstand it.
Nice story. _
6Kalista JiaInteresting intro... with the fog, glass and everything. The idea of the girl stand there with lifeless eyes certainly is intriguing. It is quite angsty~!
"Suddenly, her face changed. The smile was gone. Her eyes shone with rage, her gaze never leaving my face. I saw a small movement of her lips- first they were just slightly opening, just to be replaced with what looked like as if she was screaming. Her voice never reached me, but what she was saying-or, rather… mouthing- was painfully clear to me. She was just repeating that one word- ‘why’." (Very nice)
I did get a little confuse at the setting at first... but it clarifies more and more at the end. Just a question... is the narrator a girl? (just curious) because you said.. " ‘Stupid little girl, am I not?’" Or did I misunderstand it.
Nice story. _
10/29/2008 c1 8failte200
Jeebus Fvcking Christ. "Kind of depressed". No fvcking kidding!
Okay, well, I teared up anyway, so you got what you were hoping for - but I still feel like I was beat in the head with a hammer.
Maybe because it was first-person or something. Makes it a little too... intimate. If it were in third person I'd have been another step removed and... I dunno... probably be able to feel more analytical about it and less "touched".
But frankly - it reads like a good version of what so many of the teenage cutters write like. I'm not a big fan of teenage cutters... I hope you're not going to be another of those "everything is so tragic!" writers.
Now then. Where's the slash? I don't see no slash...
8failte200Jeebus Fvcking Christ. "Kind of depressed". No fvcking kidding!
Okay, well, I teared up anyway, so you got what you were hoping for - but I still feel like I was beat in the head with a hammer.
Maybe because it was first-person or something. Makes it a little too... intimate. If it were in third person I'd have been another step removed and... I dunno... probably be able to feel more analytical about it and less "touched".
But frankly - it reads like a good version of what so many of the teenage cutters write like. I'm not a big fan of teenage cutters... I hope you're not going to be another of those "everything is so tragic!" writers.
Now then. Where's the slash? I don't see no slash...