for And Sunday Never Came3/20/2009 c1 
3Balliett
i like the flow of your words. i wonder how your poems would sound if you were a beat poet or if the words were spoken out loud. i wonder how your poem would sound if combined with a song. i think it would be wonderful to hear this read aloud in some fashion by someone who knows expression.
3Ballietti like the flow of your words. i wonder how your poems would sound if you were a beat poet or if the words were spoken out loud. i wonder how your poem would sound if combined with a song. i think it would be wonderful to hear this read aloud in some fashion by someone who knows expression.
11/11/2008 c1 3Sybaritic
Wow, I love this. I especially love your visuals.
My favorite part is:
"You drown standing up, you stumble with grace
The Vanity spilled onto Modesty’s lace"
Again, the visuals. And also the line, "And you told the bullet you wished it would kiss me."
Great job! I totally think someone should put music to this. Like a death metal ballad or something.
3SybariticWow, I love this. I especially love your visuals.
My favorite part is:
"You drown standing up, you stumble with grace
The Vanity spilled onto Modesty’s lace"
Again, the visuals. And also the line, "And you told the bullet you wished it would kiss me."
Great job! I totally think someone should put music to this. Like a death metal ballad or something.
10/11/2008 c1 neonPOPROCKS
The last two stanzas are stuck in my head. I'm not an expert on poetry, but I do believe I have enough sense to know a good poem, a bad poem, and a poem that's trying too hard... this is a good poem. Wow. You string sentences to make a song out of words. :3
The last two stanzas are stuck in my head. I'm not an expert on poetry, but I do believe I have enough sense to know a good poem, a bad poem, and a poem that's trying too hard... this is a good poem. Wow. You string sentences to make a song out of words. :3
10/7/2008 c1 10zeropop
ugh, you never cease to produce these lyrical & gorgeous verses
and awe me.
i especially loved :
You took the train to the end of the ocean
Sent a get-well-card to that “destiny” notion
Sold your soul to the heavens ‘cause the devil don’t want it
Stole your heart from the devil ‘cause the heavens don’t got it
how do you come up with this shit?(shit in the good way)
keep up your super de duper work.
p.s, im only a sweetheart 'cause you deserve it :P
10zeropopugh, you never cease to produce these lyrical & gorgeous verses
and awe me.
i especially loved :
You took the train to the end of the ocean
Sent a get-well-card to that “destiny” notion
Sold your soul to the heavens ‘cause the devil don’t want it
Stole your heart from the devil ‘cause the heavens don’t got it
how do you come up with this shit?(shit in the good way)
keep up your super de duper work.
p.s, im only a sweetheart 'cause you deserve it :P
10/7/2008 c1 the-fire-child
Just as brilliant as 'Envy'. Your writing is very lyrical and flowing.
Kamara
Just as brilliant as 'Envy'. Your writing is very lyrical and flowing.
Kamara
10/7/2008 c1 140airplanes and oceans
that was absolutely gorgeous.
It’s Wednesday when you sang to the stars
On Thursday we seemed a mile apart
Crescent moons sprinkle the heart of your hips
Laugh at God: the lightening missed
that's my favorite part.
honestly, i wish i could write like you.
140airplanes and oceansthat was absolutely gorgeous.
It’s Wednesday when you sang to the stars
On Thursday we seemed a mile apart
Crescent moons sprinkle the heart of your hips
Laugh at God: the lightening missed
that's my favorite part.
honestly, i wish i could write like you.