for I Am But A Shadow11/15/2009 c1 
6letyoursoultakeflight
Love this- you are so talented with your poetry! Its so beautiful and I love the theme and how well you portray it. Lovely =]
6letyoursoultakeflightLove this- you are so talented with your poetry! Its so beautiful and I love the theme and how well you portray it. Lovely =]
8/2/2009 c1 28GodsLilBookWorm
This is a beautiful poem that describes a not so beautiful feeling. I love the rhyme's.
Bravo!
28GodsLilBookWormThis is a beautiful poem that describes a not so beautiful feeling. I love the rhyme's.
Bravo!
7/26/2009 c1 4The-Golden-Hour
I really like this ^^...i don't think theres any other way to improve it,congrads to you ! :O
4The-Golden-HourI really like this ^^...i don't think theres any other way to improve it,congrads to you ! :O
6/21/2009 c1 17Backchatgirl
I like this a lot. Poems about shadows, echos or reflections are always really interesting. The rhymes were good too and the repetition was simple but effective.
17BackchatgirlI like this a lot. Poems about shadows, echos or reflections are always really interesting. The rhymes were good too and the repetition was simple but effective.
6/17/2009 c1 165RandomUser674
The rhythm of this poem is not interrupted anywhere. The rhyme scheme makes the poem flow better. Awesome! Keep writing!
165RandomUser674The rhythm of this poem is not interrupted anywhere. The rhyme scheme makes the poem flow better. Awesome! Keep writing!
5/22/2009 c1 46kyox88
very good choice of words! i love how you can relate sth as simple as shadow into so many thing! what most important is, it is short and rhyme! a very well written poem! bravo!
46kyox88very good choice of words! i love how you can relate sth as simple as shadow into so many thing! what most important is, it is short and rhyme! a very well written poem! bravo!
5/5/2009 c1 5kfewh7seeeeeeefji8
This is amazing. I like the repetition of the first line, it really ties it all together. Really well written, great concept. Keep it up :)
5kfewh7seeeeeeefji8This is amazing. I like the repetition of the first line, it really ties it all together. Really well written, great concept. Keep it up :)
4/28/2009 c1 6Past Prototype
This makes me think of flying...into the cool night air.
That would certainly be nice, hm...?
I like the 'while the world is spinning fast' a quite a lot for some reason...
It makes meb think of vertigo...which to be sounds rather eerie...(the word that is...not the meaning exactly)
ja ne
6Past PrototypeThis makes me think of flying...into the cool night air.
That would certainly be nice, hm...?
I like the 'while the world is spinning fast' a quite a lot for some reason...
It makes meb think of vertigo...which to be sounds rather eerie...(the word that is...not the meaning exactly)
ja ne
3/24/2009 c1 879Moondog Dozier
I like how you've used some unexpected rhyme twists in this to catch the reader off guard, and keep them guessing. It isn't often that I enjoy works that use a consistent rhyme scheme, but you've been able to steer clear of stock rhymes and expected verse in all of the works that I've read. That is no small virtue due to the the consistent use of the rhyming form in classical literature. Very enjoyable read. MD:77.
879Moondog DozierI like how you've used some unexpected rhyme twists in this to catch the reader off guard, and keep them guessing. It isn't often that I enjoy works that use a consistent rhyme scheme, but you've been able to steer clear of stock rhymes and expected verse in all of the works that I've read. That is no small virtue due to the the consistent use of the rhyming form in classical literature. Very enjoyable read. MD:77.
3/11/2009 c1 40Jareth the Monk
Just plain good, the best thing I've read all night. Kind of reminds me of Batman, I don't know why.
I am but a shadow,
And the day confounds my form.
I am wed unto this limbo,
As the eye within the storm.
40Jareth the MonkJust plain good, the best thing I've read all night. Kind of reminds me of Batman, I don't know why.
I am but a shadow,
And the day confounds my form.
I am wed unto this limbo,
As the eye within the storm.