for Wendake1/31/2009 c1 Romantic Nun
I like this first chapter! very interesting and nicely written. looking forward to reading the rest :)
I like this first chapter! very interesting and nicely written. looking forward to reading the rest :)
1/29/2009 c5 waterfall of words
I think this was one of the best chapters yet. I'm so curious what's going on with Wolf. I have a suspicion but we'll see.
I think this was one of the best chapters yet. I'm so curious what's going on with Wolf. I have a suspicion but we'll see.
1/29/2009 c3 waterfall of words
Who doesn't hate commas? lol.
Nice chapter. I like how Lunnette is passing down her tribe's history to Sky.
Who doesn't hate commas? lol.
Nice chapter. I like how Lunnette is passing down her tribe's history to Sky.
1/29/2009 c1 waterfall of words
Oh! So sad. That's just awful. This fic was recommended to me and I'm so happy to see what happens next.
Oh! So sad. That's just awful. This fic was recommended to me and I'm so happy to see what happens next.
1/24/2009 c6 raineyday
Aww, you must update soon! I've run out of chapters to read. :P
This whole chapter was so sweet! The "bannock incident," Sky's enthusiasm over Little Wolf's return. I didn't know he would be back so fast! There's a wonderful sense of family in this story, great interaction between the characters.
"“Mama! What’s a proper young lady? What do they have to do?”"
That was so adorable. The whole conversation was very well-written and effective.
Still a few comma errors in this chapter, but again, really nothing huge. Like I said, I really hope that this is updated soon! I'm favoriting it and putting it on my alert list! ^_^
Aww, you must update soon! I've run out of chapters to read. :P
This whole chapter was so sweet! The "bannock incident," Sky's enthusiasm over Little Wolf's return. I didn't know he would be back so fast! There's a wonderful sense of family in this story, great interaction between the characters.
"“Mama! What’s a proper young lady? What do they have to do?”"
That was so adorable. The whole conversation was very well-written and effective.
Still a few comma errors in this chapter, but again, really nothing huge. Like I said, I really hope that this is updated soon! I'm favoriting it and putting it on my alert list! ^_^
1/24/2009 c5 raineyday
Another great chapter! Beautiful character interaction in this part; I love the relationship between Sky and Little Wolf. It's so sweet. Also really liked how Sky felt the need to turn to Lunette for confirmation of *everything* Little Wolf said in his story.
There are a couple punctuation errors but nothing huge. Nothing that a quick read-through wouldn't reveal. ^_^
I'm really, really interested in seeing where this story goes. I assume Little Wolf and Sky will meet up again, but I wonder how. I suppose I'll have to keep reading to find out, won't I? :P Overall, awesome chapter and I can't wait to read more!
Another great chapter! Beautiful character interaction in this part; I love the relationship between Sky and Little Wolf. It's so sweet. Also really liked how Sky felt the need to turn to Lunette for confirmation of *everything* Little Wolf said in his story.
There are a couple punctuation errors but nothing huge. Nothing that a quick read-through wouldn't reveal. ^_^
I'm really, really interested in seeing where this story goes. I assume Little Wolf and Sky will meet up again, but I wonder how. I suppose I'll have to keep reading to find out, won't I? :P Overall, awesome chapter and I can't wait to read more!
1/23/2009 c4 raineyday
Ah, I am kicking myself for not continuing to read this story sooner! There's an absolutely beautiful simplicity about your writing. You convey emotion so well and so clearly. Like in the beginning, Sky is SO set on strawberry picking. It's just adorable and at the same time, it's incredibly realistic, and it's just pure excitement.
This entire chapter has that sort of wonderful sweetness about it, a great sort of natural vibe. I don't know quite how to describe it, but the way you write for Sky just takes me back to my childhood, to how I used to run around my grandmother's massive property out in the country, completely unafraid of anything!
"She crept towards the light, her heart beating faster in excitement. What an adventure this was!"
I loved this line! There's absolutely no fear whatsoever. You capture that childlike fearlessness so well. Also, the use of italics is a good idea. It keeps the flow of the words going. And the ending was good, definitely keeps the reader's interest.
Lovely chapter! And I'll definitely read more soon!
Ah, I am kicking myself for not continuing to read this story sooner! There's an absolutely beautiful simplicity about your writing. You convey emotion so well and so clearly. Like in the beginning, Sky is SO set on strawberry picking. It's just adorable and at the same time, it's incredibly realistic, and it's just pure excitement.
This entire chapter has that sort of wonderful sweetness about it, a great sort of natural vibe. I don't know quite how to describe it, but the way you write for Sky just takes me back to my childhood, to how I used to run around my grandmother's massive property out in the country, completely unafraid of anything!
"She crept towards the light, her heart beating faster in excitement. What an adventure this was!"
I loved this line! There's absolutely no fear whatsoever. You capture that childlike fearlessness so well. Also, the use of italics is a good idea. It keeps the flow of the words going. And the ending was good, definitely keeps the reader's interest.
Lovely chapter! And I'll definitely read more soon!
1/18/2009 c6 
41Dreamweaver38
haha wow! This is great, I loved it! I'll have to go back and read the beginning when I have time!
I love Little Wolf and Sky, their so cute! and so real! All the characters are! It's amazing!
The only thing, at the beginning of the chapter, there were a couple times where you forgot to put punctuation at the end of dialogue... like:
"Dialogue,"... you'd forget the comma, or whatever.
Great Story, this is how History should be learned. Not by textbooks.
Sweet Dreams!
Keep Writing!
41Dreamweaver38haha wow! This is great, I loved it! I'll have to go back and read the beginning when I have time!
I love Little Wolf and Sky, their so cute! and so real! All the characters are! It's amazing!
The only thing, at the beginning of the chapter, there were a couple times where you forgot to put punctuation at the end of dialogue... like:
"Dialogue,"... you'd forget the comma, or whatever.
Great Story, this is how History should be learned. Not by textbooks.
Sweet Dreams!
Keep Writing!
1/17/2009 c6 13Marie St. John
Aww...that was so sweet my eyes teared up. Very nice. And if you want a good page break then try three dashes centered. It's one of the only thing that'll work. Can hardly wait till more - Please update soon!
13Marie St. JohnAww...that was so sweet my eyes teared up. Very nice. And if you want a good page break then try three dashes centered. It's one of the only thing that'll work. Can hardly wait till more - Please update soon!
1/17/2009 c5 Marie St. John
It was better. Nice foreshadowing too. You are doing a wonderful job with the relationships of the characters! Bravo.
It was better. Nice foreshadowing too. You are doing a wonderful job with the relationships of the characters! Bravo.
1/17/2009 c4 Marie St. John
Oh I am so happy to have found this story! God bless the Review game! This is very good, very engrossing, and I am thrilled that someone else is interested in the Huron and writing a story about them. And well too. The characters that you have introduced are very personable - I definitely want to read more about them.
- A.
Oh I am so happy to have found this story! God bless the Review game! This is very good, very engrossing, and I am thrilled that someone else is interested in the Huron and writing a story about them. And well too. The characters that you have introduced are very personable - I definitely want to read more about them.
- A.