8/1/2009 c1 Si-Sidera
This story has such a great quality to it! I admire how well you approach the nature of humans, and the world we live in. I especially loved how you said that our bodies are our protective shells that hide our fragile humanity. A great line.

I think that the fact that you are approaching the effect of 911 and the terroism through a girls eyes adds something special. There are so many viewpoints in the world, that we concentrate on one and forget about the others. Thank you for writing this story.

5/9/2009 c1 andeleted
Hah, I actually went and got a spoon from downstairs, put it in my mouth, and spoke, just to see what it sounded like. Good description there~

ANY way, I would just like to say, Bravo. This has my mind reeling! The way you put our modern society into such characterization was marvelous.

["People are so hungry, these days; they have no control."] Like that, right there, pretty much sums up the past few generations, referring to much more than food.

And I, personally, wanted to drop kick Vinny in the face. Ugh people like that.

That's another thing, whilst reading this, I felt little spurs of anger, sadness, in-your-face!...ness. Point being, this really got me to feel, which is probably the hardest thing for an author to accomplish.

The thing I loved most had to be the flow. I love that you built up to the main point of the story instead of making it known from the start.

There's so much I want to say about this, I can't really get it all to come out straight, hah.

Oh! The meaning of names was a nice touch, and it was good to see it repeated a bit, sticking with the opening line. It tied some parts together splendidly.

I adore Leila. Her thought processes really let the reader understand her and relate to her.

I truly can't find anything negative or critical to say about this.

I loved it.

Bravo.

3/8/2009 c1 11MissLaFontizzle
This really works for me. I have some connection to this, not being Muslim, but being different. Making a name for oneself is important, and wasting the time on being invisible isn't worth it. I enjoyed it.

2/1/2009 c1 9Dot Cubed
omg, writ. this was absolutely amazing. like i'm sitting here, contemplating whether or not i'm going to cry, because i don't know, something about this just DID that to me, if that makes any sense. and like, i am so mad at myself for not actually reading this earlier and just sort of skimming it all the time, because this was honestly that amazing and i love leila to PIECES but my heart breaks for her at the same time and vinny is such an ass and i am totally not coherent right now. i want to be, but i'm not, and part of me blames that on the fact that i just woke up (i slept really late today...it's 1:35) but i don't know.

argh i wish i could write a better review but i am just currently astounded by how GOOD/AMAZING/FANTASTICAL this was. omg, is fantastical actually a word? because normally firefox shoves a little red line under it but that's not happening now, and i think that kind of made my day.

ANYWAY.

this was just too perfect. and i love how it all connected, like when her mom gave her an apple at the end and just-i just LOVED it. i really can't say anything worthwhile, and for that i apologize.

12/30/2008 c1 9Narq
OMG! This was wonderful! Simply wondeful! Poor kid, I was simply captured in the story until the very end!

And to prove my theory that this story is so good, I'm going to add it to my favourites!

Narq.

12/26/2008 c1 12Leonis
Hey.

I really like this one; your style is as good as ever, smooth, succinct, deep. I like how you don't equate anorexia to vanity. More importantly, I suppose, I "identify", because there are incidents in your story that I feel everyone has experienced at some time, like the feeling of awkwardness, being different, and/or not being able to get your point across, no matter how hard you try. (In this case, being afraid to, I guess.)

And I really appreciate how you're writing something that concerns your life and putting it up for the public, especially since the issues involved are a little contentious. I think you're being really brave about it. :)

There are a lot of issues being addressed here, and even though it was short, it made a lot of impact. I think this works much better than several argumentative essays on racism and anorexia put together.

Keep up the good work! :)

12/17/2008 c1 4DevonnyAuriel
I really, really liked this. I went into it, not really sure what it was going to be about, but it's a great piece. More serious than Talia, which is cool. I like when authors post something that makes you realize a bit more about them.