for Lonely Has Two Syllables10/19/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
Fp repeated your first line twice.
I didn't like how repeated certain phrases and lines, it was redundant. I did the story you told, it was relateable. You portrayed your emotions well in the piece, I liked it.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game forum and/or it's Review Marathon (link in my profile)
612simpleplan13Fp repeated your first line twice.
I didn't like how repeated certain phrases and lines, it was redundant. I did the story you told, it was relateable. You portrayed your emotions well in the piece, I liked it.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game forum and/or it's Review Marathon (link in my profile)