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1/27/2009 c3 Darket
I really was getting into it. My only beef with the whole story was the dialogue. Not that it was bad, I think it's great and this story has a lot of good stuff going for it, but when people use dialogue it's best to use parenthesis like this

"Hey Jimbob, wanna smoke a blunt?"

"Far out dude!"

But besides that I wanna say your writing style has vastly improved since I last read your work. I've kinda been on hiatus for a while. I was writing the Shadow Cop novel but I quit doing it because the US economy is going under and I had to rush to join the marines before they get full.

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