for Change Me Once Again1/24/2010 c1 
4Reaching You
"Will you kiss me fiery?" is probably my favorite line.
It's a very beautiful poem, and I like the rhyme scheme you have going on here. Keep up the good work!
4Reaching You"Will you kiss me fiery?" is probably my favorite line.
It's a very beautiful poem, and I like the rhyme scheme you have going on here. Keep up the good work!
11/26/2009 c1 Haru Inuzuka
This was beautiful! :)
This was beautiful! :)
10/30/2008 c1 73Bitch Du Jour
Nothing has tugged on my heartstrings lately as much as this has. You're truely a poetic individual. This poem has beauty dripping from every word and every image. Great job!
73Bitch Du JourNothing has tugged on my heartstrings lately as much as this has. You're truely a poetic individual. This poem has beauty dripping from every word and every image. Great job!
10/25/2008 c1 Unknown Survivor
I liked the last verse the best. Nice job on this piece. (:
~Unknown Survivor
I liked the last verse the best. Nice job on this piece. (:
~Unknown Survivor
10/23/2008 c1 2dragonflydreamer
Okay, so the first thing I got out of this poem is that the rhyme scheme is inconsistant, which then made me wonder if it was intentional. was just distracting.
Anyway, other than that, I thought this was a very nice poem.
I liked the first line. Your phraze "frozen lips" was a good hook because it made me wonder why they were frozen. The contrast to this later with "kiss me fiery" as also interesting.
I also liked the second stanza. The separation of this by giving it only three lines was interesting, I liked the repition of "always goes." The way you wrote it, it almost read like a sigh.
The only other thing that I didn't like was the line "Will you kiss me fiery?" You stuck a future conditional in with present (or something like that. Sorry, I only know tenses in Spanish :P) It was an interesting line, but it sounded weird.
Nice work. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this :)
2dragonflydreamerOkay, so the first thing I got out of this poem is that the rhyme scheme is inconsistant, which then made me wonder if it was intentional. was just distracting.
Anyway, other than that, I thought this was a very nice poem.
I liked the first line. Your phraze "frozen lips" was a good hook because it made me wonder why they were frozen. The contrast to this later with "kiss me fiery" as also interesting.
I also liked the second stanza. The separation of this by giving it only three lines was interesting, I liked the repition of "always goes." The way you wrote it, it almost read like a sigh.
The only other thing that I didn't like was the line "Will you kiss me fiery?" You stuck a future conditional in with present (or something like that. Sorry, I only know tenses in Spanish :P) It was an interesting line, but it sounded weird.
Nice work. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this :)