for Wrath4/12/2011 c8 horsegurl770
OMG this is amazing, you have created such amazing characters, and your writing is portraying each one so artistically, even though it is so succinct and telling in abstract ways.
I ADORE THIS.
please, please continue this!
OMG this is amazing, you have created such amazing characters, and your writing is portraying each one so artistically, even though it is so succinct and telling in abstract ways.
I ADORE THIS.
please, please continue this!
4/17/2009 c8 
6Carmel March
Phewie! I just read this in one go, and I must say...bravo! I usually get distracted while reading stories on FP, but this one kept me going the entire time. I'm loving the characters, the originality that you're using, and pretty much everything. I can't wait for more!
~Carm~
6Carmel MarchPhewie! I just read this in one go, and I must say...bravo! I usually get distracted while reading stories on FP, but this one kept me going the entire time. I'm loving the characters, the originality that you're using, and pretty much everything. I can't wait for more!
~Carm~
4/16/2009 c8 3Kristina Suko
I really enjoyed reading what you have, and I hope you are able to write more. There were a few spelling errors, minor punctuation errors (using it's instead of its), but overall the grammar and spelling and punctuation are good. It's very engaging and interesting and suspensful. I like it. And I like that Josh isn't the usual prince charming who gets all defensive and tries to protect her... yet. It's good.
I like the name Axel...
Good job so far!
~Mara
3Kristina SukoI really enjoyed reading what you have, and I hope you are able to write more. There were a few spelling errors, minor punctuation errors (using it's instead of its), but overall the grammar and spelling and punctuation are good. It's very engaging and interesting and suspensful. I like it. And I like that Josh isn't the usual prince charming who gets all defensive and tries to protect her... yet. It's good.
I like the name Axel...
Good job so far!
~Mara
4/16/2009 c1 Kristina Suko
Goodness, I love it already. Her narration makes me smile; she's very humorous, even when realizing she's being stalked. The summary was absolutely irresistable! I'm looking forward to reading the next chapters!
~Mara
Goodness, I love it already. Her narration makes me smile; she's very humorous, even when realizing she's being stalked. The summary was absolutely irresistable! I'm looking forward to reading the next chapters!
~Mara
4/7/2009 c8 lemontea-addict
Hmm... you've gotten me curious as to what will happen next. Specially Lara's background being revealed. Yep i'm pretty anxious to find out. Hope i will read more from you soon! =] keep up the good work!
Hmm... you've gotten me curious as to what will happen next. Specially Lara's background being revealed. Yep i'm pretty anxious to find out. Hope i will read more from you soon! =] keep up the good work!
2/1/2009 c8 meduse
OH WOW. This chapter was so descriptive. Now I'm ashamed of my obvious (lack of) skill in that area. OH WELL *bursts into tears*
great chapter, Axel creeps me out SO MUCH...he's...*shudders*
I hope something good happens soon...i'm beginning to get worried
~DixieAusten
OH WOW. This chapter was so descriptive. Now I'm ashamed of my obvious (lack of) skill in that area. OH WELL *bursts into tears*
great chapter, Axel creeps me out SO MUCH...he's...*shudders*
I hope something good happens soon...i'm beginning to get worried
~DixieAusten
1/18/2009 c7 meduse
steamy, huh?
we're finally getting there...
lolz
RAY! HE'S HERE! I love his line...so cute ^_^
watch him turn out to be this evil guy who I'll eventually hate :(
Awesome chap, and it's getting VERY VERY VERY interesting!
Update soon ;D
~DixieAusten
steamy, huh?
we're finally getting there...
lolz
RAY! HE'S HERE! I love his line...so cute ^_^
watch him turn out to be this evil guy who I'll eventually hate :(
Awesome chap, and it's getting VERY VERY VERY interesting!
Update soon ;D
~DixieAusten
1/12/2009 c6 3Amarantis
The cliffhanger was definitely funny and absolutely nothing what I expected. Why did they choose her to join their family? Is she going to be turned or stay as human? Nice introduction to characters.
3AmarantisThe cliffhanger was definitely funny and absolutely nothing what I expected. Why did they choose her to join their family? Is she going to be turned or stay as human? Nice introduction to characters.
1/11/2009 c6 Papertrail
I called it!
Whenr she said rectangular box I was like "pregnancy test for sure" lol
Im liking this story a lot so far please please please please keep it coming =]
I called it!
Whenr she said rectangular box I was like "pregnancy test for sure" lol
Im liking this story a lot so far please please please please keep it coming =]
1/11/2009 c6 meduse
?
wha?
PREGNANCY TEST? =0
Excuse me, I'm in temporary shock.
ok, first of all, FINALLY there's a new chapter!
but i understand that you were probably busy...so was i...ok, now i'm feeling guilty for not updating ANYTHING.
but WOW.
nice chapter.
can't wait for the next one (hopefully it'll have Ray in it)
*wink wink nudge nudge* ^_^
~DixieAusten
?
wha?
PREGNANCY TEST? =0
Excuse me, I'm in temporary shock.
ok, first of all, FINALLY there's a new chapter!
but i understand that you were probably busy...so was i...ok, now i'm feeling guilty for not updating ANYTHING.
but WOW.
nice chapter.
can't wait for the next one (hopefully it'll have Ray in it)
*wink wink nudge nudge* ^_^
~DixieAusten
11/22/2008 c5 CookieMunster715
Another great chapter! Keep up the fabulous work!
Update soon!
~Cookie
Another great chapter! Keep up the fabulous work!
Update soon!
~Cookie