9/6/2010 c1 9CookieWonderhead
It was incredible. I devored it all in one day. I adored the passionate scenes. However, I think the ending was too abrupt. I loved it, nontheless
It was incredible. I devored it all in one day. I adored the passionate scenes. However, I think the ending was too abrupt. I loved it, nontheless
9/5/2010 c17 WolfLover74
I truly have enjoyed this story, and I, for one, would love to read an Epilogue.
I truly have enjoyed this story, and I, for one, would love to read an Epilogue.
9/3/2010 c17 Rose Rampage
Really good story! Totally in love with Alik. Only comment I really have is I feel like the ending was rushed. There wasn't really any conclusion to the whole Jesse/Alik conflict. Did Jesse die? What was up with Nate? I think the whole love side was beautifully developed, just had some issues with the plot conflict. Good start!
Really good story! Totally in love with Alik. Only comment I really have is I feel like the ending was rushed. There wasn't really any conclusion to the whole Jesse/Alik conflict. Did Jesse die? What was up with Nate? I think the whole love side was beautifully developed, just had some issues with the plot conflict. Good start!
9/2/2010 c17 Dead Deactivated
I mean I changed my nickname 3 times befoer you updated again.. Obviously your a were a WEE bit late updating :) But I truly
I mean I changed my nickname 3 times befoer you updated again.. Obviously your a were a WEE bit late updating :) But I truly
9/2/2010 c17 Da-zGreen
Nice finish! I totally think there should be epilouge. Is there going to be a sequel about her sister Aubrey? ANyways, totally I vote for an epilouge. Thanks! I wish to read more of your stories in the near future. You are a great reader. We've been on a fun ride. lol
Nice finish! I totally think there should be epilouge. Is there going to be a sequel about her sister Aubrey? ANyways, totally I vote for an epilouge. Thanks! I wish to read more of your stories in the near future. You are a great reader. We've been on a fun ride. lol
9/2/2010 c17 ebs12
I really liked your story but the ending was disappointing, not only because of how short it was but it was also anticlimactic. I don't like a ton of violence in the stories i read but when the whole story seems to have been headed towards a fight and thgen to just skip it - it doesn't read well. And also the loose ends what about Elizabeth's friends? what happens to Tim? what about Jesse's followers which was the reason that Alik wasn't going to kill him? anything going to happen between Derrek and Melphas or was that just random? I'm sorry if you think i'm being harsh, it's just one person who read your stories opinion so it should be easily ignored, and I would like to say again that I really did like the story
I really liked your story but the ending was disappointing, not only because of how short it was but it was also anticlimactic. I don't like a ton of violence in the stories i read but when the whole story seems to have been headed towards a fight and thgen to just skip it - it doesn't read well. And also the loose ends what about Elizabeth's friends? what happens to Tim? what about Jesse's followers which was the reason that Alik wasn't going to kill him? anything going to happen between Derrek and Melphas or was that just random? I'm sorry if you think i'm being harsh, it's just one person who read your stories opinion so it should be easily ignored, and I would like to say again that I really did like the story
9/2/2010 c17 Red
Fuzzy feelings :D
Fuzzy feelings :D
7/24/2010 c16 E X H I B I T I O N I S T
I can'tcan'tcan'tcan'tfucking wait for the next chapter this story is so good oh my gosh! lol I want to know what happens~ More like a need, but oh well :)
I can'tcan'tcan'tcan'tfucking wait for the next chapter this story is so good oh my gosh! lol I want to know what happens~ More like a need, but oh well :)
7/23/2010 c16 10Sabreal
Jesse is such an A-hole.
And Doc is such a sterotypical "mad scientist"
except mad scientists are generally associated with genius's and Doc is just...
sad.
Hope Alik rescues her soon tho, coz torture is not cool.
and things that aren't cool deserve to be binned.
TEEHEE
;)
Jesse is such an A-hole.
And Doc is such a sterotypical "mad scientist"
except mad scientists are generally associated with genius's and Doc is just...
sad.
Hope Alik rescues her soon tho, coz torture is not cool.
and things that aren't cool deserve to be binned.
TEEHEE
;)
7/22/2010 c16 charm en route
Oh, goodness, Alik needs to hurry up.
Also, Doc is super mega creepy. Hahah, this is a great story. :D
Oh, goodness, Alik needs to hurry up.
Also, Doc is super mega creepy. Hahah, this is a great story. :D