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11/4/2008 c1 18DarkRose1593
Oh, this poem is SO good. It's romantic and heartfelt and I can relate. Even the technicalities of the poem are good-you have a good rhyme scheme (well, whatever it's called) and a good rhythm altogether. All in all, very sweet. :)
10/29/2008 c1 Fragile Things
(thanks for the review) i thought the last line of a few verses could have been handled better, but i loved these two sentences:Words die on my tongue, my thoughts come undone,

This must be what it's like to love someone AND Days are spent hoping for a glimpse of his face, His back, his shoulders, his muscular grace. nice job
10/28/2008 c1 56Luna Turner
I really love this piece.

The only line I had a problem with was "When he's nearby my face a blush heats"

I didn't really like that one. It seemed as if it didn't fit.

But besides that, I liked this poem.

~Luna Turner

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