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11/4/2008 c1 18DarkRose1593
This is a very good poem, it expresses so much emotion. I wasn't sure about the hyphens at first, but it was your way of writing and it's all-in-all pretty good. :)
10/28/2008 c1 12tabularasatabularasatabul
I think the punctuation you use reflects the disjointed nature of your thoughts and emotions at the time really well
10/28/2008 c1 56Luna Turner
I'm sorry for what inspired this poem.

I like how you expressed all that you were feeling. I'm sure many people can relate, and that's what will draw them to this piece.

However- I found the (-)irritating and it made it choppy. I don't know if this was your intention, but I would suggest maybe comas or seperating them in seperate lines.

I did enjoy reading this.

~Luna Turner

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