
4/14/2018 c8 SDIAZ
Hi I have read this several times already and now in this chapter the club part reminded me of two people I meet on a bar, off course not the phisical aspect but part of the dynamic, they were from singapore one was demure and slightly older and the other one was totally young and free, the older one was like a commerce diplomat thingy in NYC for their government and the other one just follow her there I didnt got to know them long but now I remember seing them you couldnt tell they were together at all
Hi I have read this several times already and now in this chapter the club part reminded me of two people I meet on a bar, off course not the phisical aspect but part of the dynamic, they were from singapore one was demure and slightly older and the other one was totally young and free, the older one was like a commerce diplomat thingy in NYC for their government and the other one just follow her there I didnt got to know them long but now I remember seing them you couldnt tell they were together at all
2/12/2015 c42 Girama
At first I was a bit puzzled and confused by this story, but later I realized that the story became more and more interesting and full of details and descriptions and I've seen how much you've loved writing it. Really, thank you! _
At first I was a bit puzzled and confused by this story, but later I realized that the story became more and more interesting and full of details and descriptions and I've seen how much you've loved writing it. Really, thank you! _
8/24/2014 c27 Good writing
Though I didn't think it turned out this way.
Ever hear of dressing in drag?
Though I didn't think it turned out this way.
Ever hear of dressing in drag?
5/7/2014 c43 Guest
Okay...this last chapter was unnecessary but it was good.
the whole story rocks...it was great.
i hope you write more.
Okay...this last chapter was unnecessary but it was good.
the whole story rocks...it was great.
i hope you write more.
5/6/2014 c34 Guest
I cant wait anymore...i want elise and randy together.
(sigh)
I cant wait anymore...i want elise and randy together.
(sigh)
5/6/2014 c30 Guest
So sad...so so sad...i dont like this situation at all.
and again...great story.
So sad...so so sad...i dont like this situation at all.
and again...great story.
5/6/2014 c27 Guest
Well...her mother said"i hate lesbians"and it would b fun and surprise if randi responded"well mom im a lesbian." ;)
It was a good more secrets.
Well...her mother said"i hate lesbians"and it would b fun and surprise if randi responded"well mom im a lesbian." ;)
It was a good more secrets.
5/5/2014 c17 Guest
I didnt like the conversation between roger and major at all.
especially roger...he's an idiot.
I didnt like the conversation between roger and major at all.
especially roger...he's an idiot.
8/7/2013 c42 Artly
I bet it felt really good to write "fin" after all this work. In many ways this is the perfect work of fiction for this site. With all the cliffhangers, lesbian drama, plot twists, and erotic sex scenes it was hard to rip my eyes away and I can very easily see why this story is so popular. I feel like I just finished watching the last season of the L word! Seriously this could be transformed into one epic Tv series. I loved how real all the characters felt. They were all distinct in their own way and even the side characters underwent their own trails. This was very well done. I cant wait to read more if your work.
I bet it felt really good to write "fin" after all this work. In many ways this is the perfect work of fiction for this site. With all the cliffhangers, lesbian drama, plot twists, and erotic sex scenes it was hard to rip my eyes away and I can very easily see why this story is so popular. I feel like I just finished watching the last season of the L word! Seriously this could be transformed into one epic Tv series. I loved how real all the characters felt. They were all distinct in their own way and even the side characters underwent their own trails. This was very well done. I cant wait to read more if your work.
8/6/2013 c23 Artly
I should drop another review off here since I'm about halfway done. I loved the dynamics between Randi and the rest of the family. The reader could really feel the uncomfortableness of the situation espesially since you used such great details. When Randi was leaving after Roger proposed to Elise I loved how you described her appearance. It really showed Randi's personality as well as the differences in social caste which added to the tension in that scene. I really want to know what Randi is still hiding from Elise! To the next chapter!
I should drop another review off here since I'm about halfway done. I loved the dynamics between Randi and the rest of the family. The reader could really feel the uncomfortableness of the situation espesially since you used such great details. When Randi was leaving after Roger proposed to Elise I loved how you described her appearance. It really showed Randi's personality as well as the differences in social caste which added to the tension in that scene. I really want to know what Randi is still hiding from Elise! To the next chapter!
8/4/2013 c10 Artly
I should probably stop for a moment and write a review. Its just so easy to keep reading with the story. At first I was really worried for Elise because she is the one thats older and Randi didn't strike me as someone who was all that responsible but youve made her very thoughtful so i can see how the relationship is able to function. I still feel like Randi is very emotionally immature though so I guess ill keep reading and see what conflict occurs. Nice writing and I literally laughed out loud when Randi was at the beach and referenced Elise as her mother saying "mommy please don't beat me!" Such a hoot!
I should probably stop for a moment and write a review. Its just so easy to keep reading with the story. At first I was really worried for Elise because she is the one thats older and Randi didn't strike me as someone who was all that responsible but youve made her very thoughtful so i can see how the relationship is able to function. I still feel like Randi is very emotionally immature though so I guess ill keep reading and see what conflict occurs. Nice writing and I literally laughed out loud when Randi was at the beach and referenced Elise as her mother saying "mommy please don't beat me!" Such a hoot!
5/17/2013 c1 big fan
I read this story a few times in the past but never reviewed. Now that I'm writing my own stories (fan fiction) though I get how much a review makes an author's day...hence I'm here.
This is hand down, the best lesbian story on fictionpress. Technically this is opinion, but I'll be real money on it. Randi's like a young latina Shane...HOT. Randi and Elise have fantastic chemistry, so kudos on creating that. My only gripe with you is that your other stories aren't as long, and that you haven't written anything new in a really long time. Please come back. Ooooh, if I may suggest? A teacher/student romance? High school, not college...more forbidden, more sexy hehe. It's cliche I know, but I have a feeling you can do it tastefully (though don't you dare spare us the sex!)
I read this story a few times in the past but never reviewed. Now that I'm writing my own stories (fan fiction) though I get how much a review makes an author's day...hence I'm here.
This is hand down, the best lesbian story on fictionpress. Technically this is opinion, but I'll be real money on it. Randi's like a young latina Shane...HOT. Randi and Elise have fantastic chemistry, so kudos on creating that. My only gripe with you is that your other stories aren't as long, and that you haven't written anything new in a really long time. Please come back. Ooooh, if I may suggest? A teacher/student romance? High school, not college...more forbidden, more sexy hehe. It's cliche I know, but I have a feeling you can do it tastefully (though don't you dare spare us the sex!)
3/7/2013 c42 rleefitz
Found this as a cruised the favorites of another of my favorite writers. Thank you so much for this journey. I did feel that you dropped the plot line concerning Marissa's vocalization of "not being a lesbian" diatribe and not having some sort of closer with Randi when she was outed. May your muse continue to whisper in your ear.
Found this as a cruised the favorites of another of my favorite writers. Thank you so much for this journey. I did feel that you dropped the plot line concerning Marissa's vocalization of "not being a lesbian" diatribe and not having some sort of closer with Randi when she was outed. May your muse continue to whisper in your ear.
10/2/2012 c44 Guest
This is very impressive. you knocked me off my feet. you are d best writer on ficpress.
This is very impressive. you knocked me off my feet. you are d best writer on ficpress.
4/6/2012 c44 Sarah
I just found this yesterday , this is Amazing I love everything about it , congrats and writte more , I am like 2 years late but I hope you had won that contest you were on , also it was sort of strange to hear from my country in one of the chapter am from Venezuela and the crazy guy still president hahah that is really sad
I just found this yesterday , this is Amazing I love everything about it , congrats and writte more , I am like 2 years late but I hope you had won that contest you were on , also it was sort of strange to hear from my country in one of the chapter am from Venezuela and the crazy guy still president hahah that is really sad