for Being lied to11/22/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
"or does he like to see me hurt"... I think you should end this with a question mark since it's a question
I didn't really like the last line because the line before it seemed like such a great ending! The piece is a bit cliched, but definitely relateable and heartfelt.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile)
612simpleplan13"or does he like to see me hurt"... I think you should end this with a question mark since it's a question
I didn't really like the last line because the line before it seemed like such a great ending! The piece is a bit cliched, but definitely relateable and heartfelt.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile)
11/7/2008 c1 88Militant Poet
Powerful piece, you have a lot of great raw emotion here...brought a tear to my eye
88Militant PoetPowerful piece, you have a lot of great raw emotion here...brought a tear to my eye