for Chivalry is Dead5/25/2009 c1 
12Xalga
I have to say that the structure, the physical layout, was enjoyable. The anonymous feel you gave to the character was also a great way to portray your story.
12XalgaI have to say that the structure, the physical layout, was enjoyable. The anonymous feel you gave to the character was also a great way to portray your story.
12/19/2008 c1 Si-Sidera
Dear goodness, you're right. What happened to the knights in shining armor? The damsels are broken and bleeding, the knights, drunken and falling. But the romance still has a chance, doesn't it?
Dear goodness, you're right. What happened to the knights in shining armor? The damsels are broken and bleeding, the knights, drunken and falling. But the romance still has a chance, doesn't it?
11/6/2008 c1 My-Arabian-Knight
OOh that was cute. Great story, well written too. I loved how you had "Chivalry was dead" and "The damsel in distress was dead" all throughout the story.
OOh that was cute. Great story, well written too. I loved how you had "Chivalry was dead" and "The damsel in distress was dead" all throughout the story.
11/4/2008 c1 Trinity
That was so sweet! Well written!
That was so sweet! Well written!
11/4/2008 c1 1kris932
I was writing you a nice long review when my internet blinked out and I lost what I had typed. But since, I really though this deserved a nice long novel length review I started it up again. All right, a few mistakes I caught…starting with: “damsel is distress was dead, but she fluttered” is should be in. Next: “or that they were later for their reservation” later should be late, I believe? Easy mistakes to make, nothing a little proofreading won’t fix. I didn’t see any comma mistakes, so you’re good to go on that.
I really like this…I found it slightly bittersweet with the unnamed boy and girl and how they treated each other. I found it really cute that the boy doesn’t complain about his car getting all messy.
The repeating of the sayings helped with the flow and gave it a nice sound when reading it.
Good Job, I liked this one a lot.
1kris932I was writing you a nice long review when my internet blinked out and I lost what I had typed. But since, I really though this deserved a nice long novel length review I started it up again. All right, a few mistakes I caught…starting with: “damsel is distress was dead, but she fluttered” is should be in. Next: “or that they were later for their reservation” later should be late, I believe? Easy mistakes to make, nothing a little proofreading won’t fix. I didn’t see any comma mistakes, so you’re good to go on that.
I really like this…I found it slightly bittersweet with the unnamed boy and girl and how they treated each other. I found it really cute that the boy doesn’t complain about his car getting all messy.
The repeating of the sayings helped with the flow and gave it a nice sound when reading it.
Good Job, I liked this one a lot.