for Freedom poem11/15/2008 c1 
2dragonflydreamer
I like this. The phrasing and the word choice really contributed to the idea of freedom. Your rhythm was also very strong and contributed a lot to this idea. The only thing I noticed was that a few phrases were a little akward to accommodate the rhyme, but it wasn't that noticable.
Happy writing!
2dragonflydreamerI like this. The phrasing and the word choice really contributed to the idea of freedom. Your rhythm was also very strong and contributed a lot to this idea. The only thing I noticed was that a few phrases were a little akward to accommodate the rhyme, but it wasn't that noticable.
Happy writing!