for Something Unexpected12/1/2008 c4 
1Jevanminx
Go her for not running away again, it will be interesting to see how she goes onto develop around him.
JM
1JevanminxGo her for not running away again, it will be interesting to see how she goes onto develop around him.
JM
11/24/2008 c3 1Jevanminx
Aw, she ran away from Callum again, and it was obvious he was playing with Heather she just doesn't seem to be able to see that does she.
JM
1JevanminxAw, she ran away from Callum again, and it was obvious he was playing with Heather she just doesn't seem to be able to see that does she.
JM
11/21/2008 c2 We Used To Wait
Oh, this chapter was pretty. I have weird adjectives for things. Heh. And I really like how Andy has selective taste in guys. Makes it more real.
Update Soon.
Oh, this chapter was pretty. I have weird adjectives for things. Heh. And I really like how Andy has selective taste in guys. Makes it more real.
Update Soon.
11/20/2008 c2 3alexismarie95
Ha.. Sorry, what i meant to say in my other review was UPDATE very soon, not REVIEW very soon. :/
Stupid me..:)
anyways..Catch ya later.
much love;
alexis marie.
3alexismarie95Ha.. Sorry, what i meant to say in my other review was UPDATE very soon, not REVIEW very soon. :/
Stupid me..:)
anyways..Catch ya later.
much love;
alexis marie.
11/18/2008 c1 alexismarie95
OMG ! This is really good. You should like review soon bfore i DIE ! Well...not seriously. (lol) Please review REALLY soon, tho. =)
Much love;
alexis marie.
OMG ! This is really good. You should like review soon bfore i DIE ! Well...not seriously. (lol) Please review REALLY soon, tho. =)
Much love;
alexis marie.
11/18/2008 c2 XxSiennaxX
Hey!
I'd like to begin by saying I really like your story so far. The characters are well built and clear and your text and expression flows really well. One thing that you could improve: your grammar in places could use a little work - you tend to say 'there chairs' for example instead of 'their chairs' - their because they own the chairs another should be 'their hair' because their hair is their own - both of these were in chapter 2. You also tend to use 'your' a bit instead of 'you're' (you are) - these are quite simple, easy to make errors that won't disrupt the story but picking up on them would help polish it off.
I can't wait to read more.
Update soon :D
Hey!
I'd like to begin by saying I really like your story so far. The characters are well built and clear and your text and expression flows really well. One thing that you could improve: your grammar in places could use a little work - you tend to say 'there chairs' for example instead of 'their chairs' - their because they own the chairs another should be 'their hair' because their hair is their own - both of these were in chapter 2. You also tend to use 'your' a bit instead of 'you're' (you are) - these are quite simple, easy to make errors that won't disrupt the story but picking up on them would help polish it off.
I can't wait to read more.
Update soon :D
11/12/2008 c1 3this is no longer in use
this story is awesome.
i kind of feeL bad for uhm andy.
cause yeah sort of going through
the same thing even though the schooL
is Like onLy at the other side of the isLand.
the peopLe stilL scare me. loL.
welL this is realLy great
pLease update soon.
- ana :]
3this is no longer in usethis story is awesome.
i kind of feeL bad for uhm andy.
cause yeah sort of going through
the same thing even though the schooL
is Like onLy at the other side of the isLand.
the peopLe stilL scare me. loL.
welL this is realLy great
pLease update soon.
- ana :]
11/12/2008 c1 12Take Another Look
Sounds good so far :D
I didn't really know what to make of Shannon and Jordan and their relationship. When I first read the part where they're first introduced I wasn't sure if she liked him, was going out with him, or was his sister. But ya, I got it after Jordan explained (obviously).
Andy's a really cool character, it must be fun writing her. I was just wondering where she is now? She's from Aussieland and did she go to the US or to the UK?
I would be interested in being a Beta reader, but I'm technically not allowed to be one yet because I haven't had an account for a month yet D: But if you still need someone in a couple weeks I'll be able to :D
12Take Another LookSounds good so far :D
I didn't really know what to make of Shannon and Jordan and their relationship. When I first read the part where they're first introduced I wasn't sure if she liked him, was going out with him, or was his sister. But ya, I got it after Jordan explained (obviously).
Andy's a really cool character, it must be fun writing her. I was just wondering where she is now? She's from Aussieland and did she go to the US or to the UK?
I would be interested in being a Beta reader, but I'm technically not allowed to be one yet because I haven't had an account for a month yet D: But if you still need someone in a couple weeks I'll be able to :D