for bittersweet9/27/2009 c1 
173Little girl Big world
I think this is rather good poetry. Great imagery is used and I like the kind of repetition from the first stanza in the last stanza. Nice job!
173Little girl Big worldI think this is rather good poetry. Great imagery is used and I like the kind of repetition from the first stanza in the last stanza. Nice job!
6/26/2009 c1 51for shame
there is something very bitter, but there is also something very justified. it just sounds like the perfect balance of vindictiveness and, well, sadness.
"scheme away because i can scheme too" - my favorite line.
51for shamethere is something very bitter, but there is also something very justified. it just sounds like the perfect balance of vindictiveness and, well, sadness.
"scheme away because i can scheme too" - my favorite line.
11/19/2008 c1 30october lies
oh man. i fucking love this.
the imagery, the metaphors, all of it just adds to the piece in the most effective and beautiful way. i love it so much. the feel of the poem, to me, seems jaded in a way, like the narrator is just telling as is without a barrel of emotions to follow behind. i freaking love this. i'm going to look at the rest of your stuff.
30october liesoh man. i fucking love this.
the imagery, the metaphors, all of it just adds to the piece in the most effective and beautiful way. i love it so much. the feel of the poem, to me, seems jaded in a way, like the narrator is just telling as is without a barrel of emotions to follow behind. i freaking love this. i'm going to look at the rest of your stuff.
11/17/2008 c1 233siphoned afterglow
i missed this piece before..
i LOVE the imagery here. its fantastic. YAY, i hope this means you've beaten your WB because people with the block don't write lovely like this.
'to paint misery with
prickly brushes into
the darkened sky
and to
stencil in hypocrisy
between the layers'
thats my favorite paragraph in the whole piece. the ending was nice too.
;)
233siphoned afterglowi missed this piece before..
i LOVE the imagery here. its fantastic. YAY, i hope this means you've beaten your WB because people with the block don't write lovely like this.
'to paint misery with
prickly brushes into
the darkened sky
and to
stencil in hypocrisy
between the layers'
thats my favorite paragraph in the whole piece. the ending was nice too.
;)