for Wish11/15/2008 c1 
37AlreadyGone
I love this and I honor the motive behind it, it is so true.
Great job!
~toodles~
37AlreadyGoneI love this and I honor the motive behind it, it is so true.
Great job!
~toodles~
11/15/2008 c1 Carus
I love the concept of this poem. It's a good idea :)
There are a couple of typos, though, and also I think that maybe the last line makes the poem sound unfinished, as if it should be leading onto something else.
The errors I noticed were:
"Saying so much words that I fear" should be '...so many...'
"I wish I weren’t here" I think should be '...wasn't here...' but I'm not that sure on that one
"I can’t stand you tone" should be '...your tone...'
I hope it doesn't seem like I'm nagging. I think that it's a really good poem =]
-Amy
I love the concept of this poem. It's a good idea :)
There are a couple of typos, though, and also I think that maybe the last line makes the poem sound unfinished, as if it should be leading onto something else.
The errors I noticed were:
"Saying so much words that I fear" should be '...so many...'
"I wish I weren’t here" I think should be '...wasn't here...' but I'm not that sure on that one
"I can’t stand you tone" should be '...your tone...'
I hope it doesn't seem like I'm nagging. I think that it's a really good poem =]
-Amy