for Lust Is Only the Beginning2/24/2012 c1 witeaya
i am hoping u are not abandoning the story.
i know its your story thus its your choice whether to continue writing or not but a girl can hope, right?
so,pls do update the story! :)
i am hoping u are not abandoning the story.
i know its your story thus its your choice whether to continue writing or not but a girl can hope, right?
so,pls do update the story! :)
11/22/2010 c7 1984
Okay sex again. That's her first orgasm ever or with another person? I know a lot of girls say they don't do that or can't do that to themselves.
Anyway. The average guy is 4-6 inches long and I've never seen one that I can't wrap my hand around. Though its written about a lot, Dr. Drew (He is a Doctor and he answers questions about sex and relationships on LoveLine.) says that 9-10 inches is biologically impossible or at least never been documented.
Pop culture has spread this idea that bigger is better. That's not true in fact six inches inside us girls is our cervix. What makes sex good is when they come close to touching it, without touching. You can't feel anything past four inches until it hits the cervix which btw is painful. The more important part for the girl is how thick it is, but before you've gotten used to having sex that can be painful too. It has to stretch out. It will also go back. So if you have sex once, then not again for a month, you're like a virgin again.
Now the way you wrote the scene for the two guys in your other story would be fine for a girl and a guy. Only after you get past the part where she gets used to it. Even when she is losing her virginity, just at the beginning things need to go slow until she gets lost in it.
Okay sex again. That's her first orgasm ever or with another person? I know a lot of girls say they don't do that or can't do that to themselves.
Anyway. The average guy is 4-6 inches long and I've never seen one that I can't wrap my hand around. Though its written about a lot, Dr. Drew (He is a Doctor and he answers questions about sex and relationships on LoveLine.) says that 9-10 inches is biologically impossible or at least never been documented.
Pop culture has spread this idea that bigger is better. That's not true in fact six inches inside us girls is our cervix. What makes sex good is when they come close to touching it, without touching. You can't feel anything past four inches until it hits the cervix which btw is painful. The more important part for the girl is how thick it is, but before you've gotten used to having sex that can be painful too. It has to stretch out. It will also go back. So if you have sex once, then not again for a month, you're like a virgin again.
Now the way you wrote the scene for the two guys in your other story would be fine for a girl and a guy. Only after you get past the part where she gets used to it. Even when she is losing her virginity, just at the beginning things need to go slow until she gets lost in it.
11/22/2010 c5 1984
Your guy does seem a little feminine, with the pouting and all. And he seems very self knowledgeable. Like he is acting like this because of this and he knows that is why he is doing it. Even though we as the readers see those answers might be obvious. Sometimes just for there to be conflict in the story, your characters shouldn't know everything about themselves or each other. Right now they both know what they want, and seems to know what each other want. They both like each other and are just nervous about dating. While it is realistic, there really isn't any conflict.
Like I said before your writing flows a lot better in this story. It doesn't feel like you are jumping from one scene to the next, but a little conflict would be nice.
Your guy does seem a little feminine, with the pouting and all. And he seems very self knowledgeable. Like he is acting like this because of this and he knows that is why he is doing it. Even though we as the readers see those answers might be obvious. Sometimes just for there to be conflict in the story, your characters shouldn't know everything about themselves or each other. Right now they both know what they want, and seems to know what each other want. They both like each other and are just nervous about dating. While it is realistic, there really isn't any conflict.
Like I said before your writing flows a lot better in this story. It doesn't feel like you are jumping from one scene to the next, but a little conflict would be nice.
11/22/2010 c1 1984
This one flows a lot better. I noticed in the first two sentences you switched tense. I always write in past, because its easier. That way whenever you change 'time' it is still in the past. After you pick a tense you want to stick with it. So even when you are switching 'time' then you still are talking about the scene as though it is happening right then, if you choose present. See, that's why I choose past, because its less confusing.
I'm not sure where this is going other than a romance between roommates right now, but I can identify with how this girl feels. Though she is probably going to be talked into it rather quickly, it works. She does want him and the only thing stopping her is that she doesn't want to seem easy. That is very realistic.
This one flows a lot better. I noticed in the first two sentences you switched tense. I always write in past, because its easier. That way whenever you change 'time' it is still in the past. After you pick a tense you want to stick with it. So even when you are switching 'time' then you still are talking about the scene as though it is happening right then, if you choose present. See, that's why I choose past, because its less confusing.
I'm not sure where this is going other than a romance between roommates right now, but I can identify with how this girl feels. Though she is probably going to be talked into it rather quickly, it works. She does want him and the only thing stopping her is that she doesn't want to seem easy. That is very realistic.
5/30/2010 c7 Lisaj345678
wow
this is really good!
cant wait for the next chapter!
btw like ur other story too :)
wow
this is really good!
cant wait for the next chapter!
btw like ur other story too :)
4/11/2010 c7 
2Its.Not.Me.Its.You
i lovelovelove your story!
cant wait for more!
please update soon!
-ifly*hugs*
2Its.Not.Me.Its.Youi lovelovelove your story!
cant wait for more!
please update soon!
-ifly*hugs*