
8/8/2011 c25
3AJS
I have to say... this story is pretty cheesy. The ending dragged such that by the time they finally officially got together I wasn't even that happy. I think there are several parts of this story that lacked substance. The real meat was in the middle, which was good, but I think you needed to have explained their previous relationship more. I think you needed to have detailed that one time in Kansas more. I think you needed to show Cav's feelings about Adrienne more. I think everything just needed to be more and better explained and more thought out because this seemed just like an idea for a story but no actual details.
Best of luck with your writing.
- Alyssa

I have to say... this story is pretty cheesy. The ending dragged such that by the time they finally officially got together I wasn't even that happy. I think there are several parts of this story that lacked substance. The real meat was in the middle, which was good, but I think you needed to have explained their previous relationship more. I think you needed to have detailed that one time in Kansas more. I think you needed to show Cav's feelings about Adrienne more. I think everything just needed to be more and better explained and more thought out because this seemed just like an idea for a story but no actual details.
Best of luck with your writing.
- Alyssa
3/2/2010 c26 DA-chen1
Well well well... really nice story!
I have shared a few tears during reading this story... It was so romantic and so honest! I like when character are acting normal like humans which can think about their behaviour without acting ridiculous! Like in movies -.- NO, your characters acted like they would think over it and choose the right thing to do! :-)
DA-chen
Well well well... really nice story!
I have shared a few tears during reading this story... It was so romantic and so honest! I like when character are acting normal like humans which can think about their behaviour without acting ridiculous! Like in movies -.- NO, your characters acted like they would think over it and choose the right thing to do! :-)
DA-chen
3/2/2010 c14 DA-chen1
Wow, and I love your story even more!
Your style is great and your characters are interesting.
I hope, more people will read this!
DA-chen
Wow, and I love your story even more!
Your style is great and your characters are interesting.
I hope, more people will read this!
DA-chen
2/6/2010 c26 jmn23
Your story is full of emotions. Cav is a very complex person, which makes the story very interesting. I truly enjoyed reading the story. It i simply wonderful.
Your story is full of emotions. Cav is a very complex person, which makes the story very interesting. I truly enjoyed reading the story. It i simply wonderful.
11/8/2009 c21 Jill
An alcoholic that ruined their liver by drinking would never be given a transplant short of someone dying and willing one to them...and even then it would have to be a really good match. They would not be considered a good candidate, because who's to say they won't start again and ruin their new liver? And then someone else out there was denied a liver so a person who had destroyed their own could have another to possibly drink to death. I'm sure if someone had been clean for years, they would perform a transplant...but even then, their prior alcoholism would be considered in determining their candidacy for a liver. As horrible as that sounds. Statistically, not many alcoholic cirrhosis patients who receive a new liver actually go back to drinking, but still, less than 10 percent of all liver transplants in the US are performed on people with alcoholic cirrhosis. Anyway, I just couldn't not comment on this little fact. So. Cheers!
An alcoholic that ruined their liver by drinking would never be given a transplant short of someone dying and willing one to them...and even then it would have to be a really good match. They would not be considered a good candidate, because who's to say they won't start again and ruin their new liver? And then someone else out there was denied a liver so a person who had destroyed their own could have another to possibly drink to death. I'm sure if someone had been clean for years, they would perform a transplant...but even then, their prior alcoholism would be considered in determining their candidacy for a liver. As horrible as that sounds. Statistically, not many alcoholic cirrhosis patients who receive a new liver actually go back to drinking, but still, less than 10 percent of all liver transplants in the US are performed on people with alcoholic cirrhosis. Anyway, I just couldn't not comment on this little fact. So. Cheers!
10/29/2009 c24 j3welzinc
Reading this again for the millionth time. Love happy endings with the band theme.
Reading this again for the millionth time. Love happy endings with the band theme.
10/17/2009 c25
11Tecna
That was a brilliant story! I really enjoyed it! I liked the way you focused on the relationship of Jaxon and Cavanaugh, but still touched upon her relationship with Miles and Andy.
I loved the interactions between the friends, that was great. I loved Andy's character, he's a great addition. Overall, a fab story, definitely worth a read!
Tecna ;)

That was a brilliant story! I really enjoyed it! I liked the way you focused on the relationship of Jaxon and Cavanaugh, but still touched upon her relationship with Miles and Andy.
I loved the interactions between the friends, that was great. I loved Andy's character, he's a great addition. Overall, a fab story, definitely worth a read!
Tecna ;)
8/4/2009 c25 animegirl214
aw! :D :D :D
with all that drama they're FINALLY together! :D :D :D
thanks for the wonderful, awesome, adorable story!
aw! :D :D :D
with all that drama they're FINALLY together! :D :D :D
thanks for the wonderful, awesome, adorable story!