for Capricorns6/14/2012 c1 
10Aerith Rei
Thank you for the review! And I love this. It's actually very inspiring. I never thought of writing in prose, but this was absolutely stunning with the imagery. Prose done right!
10Aerith ReiThank you for the review! And I love this. It's actually very inspiring. I never thought of writing in prose, but this was absolutely stunning with the imagery. Prose done right!
11/19/2008 c1 75clockwork kiss
i really love the first paragraph (minus the first sentence... out of place and too graphic for me). The second paragraph feels like a completely different poem and loses my interest. But back to the first one... great writing in there. I love the images, and i can see them in my head. love the jellyfish fingers, but i think you could cut out "in the motion-censor lights". i lost the image there and i think it was overkill. but the tree, Mozart, and muscles imagery were beautiful. nice writing.
75clockwork kissi really love the first paragraph (minus the first sentence... out of place and too graphic for me). The second paragraph feels like a completely different poem and loses my interest. But back to the first one... great writing in there. I love the images, and i can see them in my head. love the jellyfish fingers, but i think you could cut out "in the motion-censor lights". i lost the image there and i think it was overkill. but the tree, Mozart, and muscles imagery were beautiful. nice writing.