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12/20/2019 c1 heal me forever
Nothing in this storyline is good. Too fake to even finish reading the whole thing.

Nevertheless, my main concern is Mallory accepting the kiss as what she thinks or wants to do in that moment is useless according to her thoughts. What are you telling the girls out there? That it’s okay to go along for the girls when someone is forcing them rather than for the boy to accept a no means no? Urgh!
4/11/2018 c1 Acie
Great Oneshot, some translations though? We don't all know French
5/11/2017 c1 Me
WTF I feel sorry for her, for welcome him back in her life that easy, she should have moved on and be happy with somebody that won't dump her on the first year of their marriage, because you know, they only last for that period of time... Seriously, this story leaves the women with a bad reputation, like c'mon he's an asshole and that's it, she deserves something more and he doesn't deserve her, period.
11/19/2012 c1 Dandy352
It's nice :) I got nosebleed with the French LOL.
9/27/2011 c1 16non.graceful
It may be the most you've ever written, but how much of that could non-speaking french audience members understand without translating the words? You should have just used less French and more English phrases so that there could be more meaning.

The whole plot line was outlined, yet it wasn't a strong piece. The emotions being expressed within the dialogue weren't down to 100% or 60% for that case.

I think if you go back and fix up your story, it could be soooooo much better than it is now.

Treasures always need to be trashed, right?

~non.graceful

Don't take this review to heart. It's the Internet, we know each other behind false names and care naught for the other. :)
9/17/2011 c1 hcdsjnvchmkgfddgn
I love this story! It's really good but I think that you should have the English translations for when they speak French. Anyways, this is a lovely story.
1/20/2011 c1 blithe.serendipity
I kinda liked it, except I didn't understand the French and I was too lazy to put it into a translator so I just guessed what was being said. Ehh, it wasn't the best I've read-a little too predictable but pretty well written overall. It was still a good story.
12/11/2010 c1 2PotOfGoldXxx
I think it's pretty hilarious how he keeps asking her if she's okay and is something wrong when it clearly says 'I'm crying' or 'crying even harder'. Sorry just found it funny. And I loved it btw
3/7/2010 c1 truebleu
OH MY GOD!

Never mind, too cliche and fake.

Anyway, I read this story some time last year, and I still remember it. That means it made a huge impact because I have read 10+ stories.

I remembered it after thinking about good oneshots that I wanted to re-read, and this was at the top of my list.

However, I couldn't find it for SO LONG (three months?) and that was too long for me.

After agonizing hours of searching, I found it. I LOVE THIS STORY.

-truebleu

P.S. Sorry for being such a drama queen.
2/9/2010 c1 WithEveryReason
I didn't like it.

It was too fake.

You are an excellent writer, this was just too rushed for me.

And I really hated Aiden, his reasons for breaking up with Mallory didn't make sense and them getting back together in just a few minutes after all those years and after he broke her heart...

And then him asking her to marry him?

That would never happen in real life.

All I think when I read this is "Too fake!"
12/11/2009 c1 4fragilestateofmind
So cute. I love it lots :D please write more :D
10/23/2009 c1 13Aaerie
my ave art has to be the haunted house and the proposal
8/11/2009 c1 CharlotteBradhadair
i love Aiden! the story was sweet and well written (even though i only understood about of the stuff in french)

charlotte
5/21/2009 c1 Hazelnut Romance
omg. that's such a cute short story.
4/29/2009 c1 2renegade01
Lady, what is WRONG with you...? All those French words and not a single translation... Sighs. I'll just have to use my imagination. ;)
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