for Love Story12/19/2008 c1 ArrowThatMissed
Okay, cute, but your main character was definitely a Mary Sue.
At the beginning it seemed good, but then it just went downhill.
And the French really distracted from it, especially since I am fluent and it made no sense.
But cute idea.
Okay, cute, but your main character was definitely a Mary Sue.
At the beginning it seemed good, but then it just went downhill.
And the French really distracted from it, especially since I am fluent and it made no sense.
But cute idea.
12/19/2008 c1 DLETE THIS OLD
aww, such a sweet little story...the french, though, was, umm hard to understand considering i know nothing of it :D lol, but still it was nice
aww, such a sweet little story...the french, though, was, umm hard to understand considering i know nothing of it :D lol, but still it was nice
12/19/2008 c1 
17angels and effects
I love this! The protagonist has the right mix of quirky slash adorableness, and Aidan is such a sweetie pie. It was great fun reading it. :)
Just something I wanted to point out: it'd be nice to have English translations for the French bits, since some (if not most) readers don't have a grasp of the language like me, and I have absolutely no idea what's being said between the characters. Maybe a vague idea, but not as clear as I'd understand if it were in English, if you get what I mean. Just a little blurb beside the actual French dialogue would be great!
17angels and effectsI love this! The protagonist has the right mix of quirky slash adorableness, and Aidan is such a sweetie pie. It was great fun reading it. :)
Just something I wanted to point out: it'd be nice to have English translations for the French bits, since some (if not most) readers don't have a grasp of the language like me, and I have absolutely no idea what's being said between the characters. Maybe a vague idea, but not as clear as I'd understand if it were in English, if you get what I mean. Just a little blurb beside the actual French dialogue would be great!
12/19/2008 c1 andi
can u write translations snce not all of us cud speak french.
can u write translations snce not all of us cud speak french.
12/19/2008 c1 andi
can u write translations snce not all of us cud speak french.
can u write translations snce not all of us cud speak french.
12/18/2008 c1 2artistic dreamer
omg omg omg omg! this is the bestest one shot i have ever read! right from the start, i knew that even though the broke up, they would somehow get back together because i was expecting a happy ending, but i never cared for the reason why aidan broke up with her in the first place, and i just kept reading and reading and right where aidan explains how he wanted her to break up so she could have more options, he didn't want to hold her back and stuff...that part...my heart melted. that is the sweetest most romantic thing ever! what can i say, i'm a hopeless romantic at heart. though it was a bit heartbreaking for mallory, i really loved how aidan felt and didn't want mallory to be stuck with only dating one guy. but he wanted to propose to her! how cute! this oneshot is so insanely adorable, i'm still replaying all the cute scenes in my head...which is like basically the entire story lol :D awesome awesome job! write more please! :D loved it!
2artistic dreameromg omg omg omg! this is the bestest one shot i have ever read! right from the start, i knew that even though the broke up, they would somehow get back together because i was expecting a happy ending, but i never cared for the reason why aidan broke up with her in the first place, and i just kept reading and reading and right where aidan explains how he wanted her to break up so she could have more options, he didn't want to hold her back and stuff...that part...my heart melted. that is the sweetest most romantic thing ever! what can i say, i'm a hopeless romantic at heart. though it was a bit heartbreaking for mallory, i really loved how aidan felt and didn't want mallory to be stuck with only dating one guy. but he wanted to propose to her! how cute! this oneshot is so insanely adorable, i'm still replaying all the cute scenes in my head...which is like basically the entire story lol :D awesome awesome job! write more please! :D loved it!
12/18/2008 c1 19toffeecakesxox
SO CUTE. Oh gosh, I started crying when he proposed! (I've been crying a lot lately, I don't know why...)
AW, so CUTE!
-toffeecakesxox.
19toffeecakesxoxSO CUTE. Oh gosh, I started crying when he proposed! (I've been crying a lot lately, I don't know why...)
AW, so CUTE!
-toffeecakesxox.
11/28/2008 c1 2EnchantedKorean
Very cute. I was slightly peeved at how insecure mallory was, but it all worked out in the end, so I'm very happy. haha. good job. :)
2EnchantedKoreanVery cute. I was slightly peeved at how insecure mallory was, but it all worked out in the end, so I'm very happy. haha. good job. :)
11/23/2008 c1 31Cupid's Jinx
Oh. My. Gosh.
That was...YOU MADE ME TEAR UP!
Do you know how rare that is?
...Very rare...
I loved it XD
L
-x-
31Cupid's JinxOh. My. Gosh.
That was...YOU MADE ME TEAR UP!
Do you know how rare that is?
...Very rare...
I loved it XD
L
-x-
11/23/2008 c1 PaintSunshine
major fluff.
totally sweet and adorable and cute. made me sigh the entire way.
totally lifted my sprits up.
major fluff.
totally sweet and adorable and cute. made me sigh the entire way.
totally lifted my sprits up.
11/23/2008 c1 4i-aspire
hey, i really like your story and I was trying to understand the french :) (i learn french at school) and i just found a mistake, just a little one, but yeh just letting you know because I like being told when i make mistakes so yeh, i try to do the same for others :)
"je tu aime toujours,""
je t'aime toujours
:)
xx
aussie-crazy-banana
4i-aspirehey, i really like your story and I was trying to understand the french :) (i learn french at school) and i just found a mistake, just a little one, but yeh just letting you know because I like being told when i make mistakes so yeh, i try to do the same for others :)
"je tu aime toujours,""
je t'aime toujours
:)
xx
aussie-crazy-banana
11/22/2008 c1 Noie
I totally enjoyed this, but I think he should have groveled a little more! Very well done. Thanks for posting!
I totally enjoyed this, but I think he should have groveled a little more! Very well done. Thanks for posting!