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8/31/2009 c1 Reigh
I'd love to hear the story behind this poem. As a psychology major, it sounds like the internal turmoil of a schizophrenic person. Which, if it is, that's quite sad. Schizophrenia is one of the worst diseases a person can have. They don't even know they're sick. Sometimes, they voices they hear, or the delusions they have can be scary for them. I can't imagine living that kind of life.

Good work on this, if that's what you were going for. You've definitely captured that frame of mind perfectly.


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6/3/2009 c1 Icyfire4w5
I love this poem, it is so short, but very rich in emotions. I know how terrible those voices in one's head can be, once they start, they cannot be stopped.
1/26/2009 c1 Stargazer05
I liked it.

Formatting was nice, I liked how you had the bold letters and the italicized letters and the normal letters.

It looked pretty cool!
1/8/2009 c1 4Frayling0
Woo, I really enjoyed it. Flows really well, and has ingenious use of form on the page and fonts! Great work :)
1/8/2009 c1 7Chance J
Have you ever seen a show called Firefly? 'cus I think you were channeling River Tam when you wrote this. :P

It's got a kind of random, stream of consciousness thought process to it, but at the same time it's structured (Albeit very shakily,) within that randomness. This is like looking at a rickety old building that's about to fall down. Or looking at someone half-crazy that's about to totally lose it.

Reminds me of more than a few people I knew in college, come to think of it.

Anyway, it's really good. The random stresses - the capitalization, the punctuation, the bold and italics - combined with the odd sentence breaks to really give it a sense of fading sanity.

I'm a big Firefly fan, so comparing it to River Tam is probably the best compliment I could give a work like this. Very nice.
12/8/2008 c1 65noebody
this was a really awesome poem.. i loved how you wrote and formatted it.. really made it pop
11/27/2008 c1 44Stormer
This is an amazing poem - wow! I just envision a tortured soul ranting and raving. I figure that isn't an insult since you say you have no idea where this came from, so perhaps it's not personal ;)
11/27/2008 c1 FuckMeAlice
For some reason, this reminds me of the one (and only) episode of Fringe I watched. Disturbing, but in a good way. Wow. You managed to freak me out.

11/25/2008 c1 6ephemeral dance
Awh, Cae. I loved this. The formatting was interesting and really added to it. It kind of kept me alert... if that makes any sense at all. You're freakishly talented. Great job. :)

- Vaa
11/24/2008 c1 10TheMonomaniacalGoblin
I really love the formatting, especially "-from me-", the indented part had a feeling of shrinking away, and getting smaller.

Seriously, great job portraying everything- choice of words, too. "They come/ under the shadows/ of night" I still can`t get over the format. Freaking genius, because then visual people like me don`t sit there reading a block of words, thinking "guh..." I love, it, Cae!

11/24/2008 c1 11Fights-With-Words
Nice... interesting form you've got there. I'm not a poet, but I like this! -Stio =D

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