for Crashing4/22/2010 c1 unnamed reader
That was beautiful. :-)
That was beautiful. :-)
1/29/2009 c1 ribbons-paws
Really enjoyed it! Even though I- personally- am not a big fan of very short stories- not necessarily oneshots, but generally, short stories- this story made me smile. It's very cute, actually. One girl having a crush on a guy, who tested her love for him by pretending that he was a gay- and that girl, either wanting to say that she still loves him despite of his sexuality, or saying that that moment was the last time that she will go crushing on him, it's so ADORABLE! I really, really LOVE it. And if you have the time to do so, please make a sequel to this wonderfully-written story. Please and thank you.
~p.n.b.f.
Really enjoyed it! Even though I- personally- am not a big fan of very short stories- not necessarily oneshots, but generally, short stories- this story made me smile. It's very cute, actually. One girl having a crush on a guy, who tested her love for him by pretending that he was a gay- and that girl, either wanting to say that she still loves him despite of his sexuality, or saying that that moment was the last time that she will go crushing on him, it's so ADORABLE! I really, really LOVE it. And if you have the time to do so, please make a sequel to this wonderfully-written story. Please and thank you.
~p.n.b.f.
12/24/2008 c1 anonymous
although i'm not a big fan of supershort stories, they can be extremely poignant and amazing at times.
i like your style, but (take no offense) i don't like this oneshot. maybe it's because i just don't like the characters? no- i don't know them. i don't like the fact that he said "i'm gay" and then "i lied"
i would have punched him.
so i guess i like the prose but not the content?
i dont know if this helps you at all...
although i'm not a big fan of supershort stories, they can be extremely poignant and amazing at times.
i like your style, but (take no offense) i don't like this oneshot. maybe it's because i just don't like the characters? no- i don't know them. i don't like the fact that he said "i'm gay" and then "i lied"
i would have punched him.
so i guess i like the prose but not the content?
i dont know if this helps you at all...
12/23/2008 c1 
10nul
Oh Lordie.
I love how short it is, and even though shortness is annoying at points, you made it work.
You wrote this whole story within a couple or more of lines.
And that is amazing.
I love how she decided to kiss him, and though some may find it confusing (like I did at first), it makes sense in the end.
She was crushing on him, right?
So she decided to kiss him, to end this crush, or something like that?
I don't think those last sentences made any sense at all.
Wait. QUESTION:
Who says, "Then forgive me?"
I think its the guy, but you wrote it on the same line as the girl.
I think you're supposed to put each different speaker on different lines, if that makes sense.
I love how he lied.
Though, I don't understand why?
why say you're gay, when you're not?
BUT I REALLY LIKED IT! It was brilliance at it's best!
kthnxbai,
Martin the Waterskier
10nulOh Lordie.
I love how short it is, and even though shortness is annoying at points, you made it work.
You wrote this whole story within a couple or more of lines.
And that is amazing.
I love how she decided to kiss him, and though some may find it confusing (like I did at first), it makes sense in the end.
She was crushing on him, right?
So she decided to kiss him, to end this crush, or something like that?
I don't think those last sentences made any sense at all.
Wait. QUESTION:
Who says, "Then forgive me?"
I think its the guy, but you wrote it on the same line as the girl.
I think you're supposed to put each different speaker on different lines, if that makes sense.
I love how he lied.
Though, I don't understand why?
why say you're gay, when you're not?
BUT I REALLY LIKED IT! It was brilliance at it's best!
kthnxbai,
Martin the Waterskier
12/22/2008 c1 2florations
WoW, So SHoRT YeT So PoWERFUL. iLiKEY! :D LoL. i knOw this uncapital-capitalized words are buggers. lol. ;D
2nd BEST ONESHOT FOR ME. ;D
2florationsWoW, So SHoRT YeT So PoWERFUL. iLiKEY! :D LoL. i knOw this uncapital-capitalized words are buggers. lol. ;D
2nd BEST ONESHOT FOR ME. ;D
12/19/2008 c1 7Phillippa Carey
:D
I love it.
It's written so simply, and i can see it like its a film being played in my head.
7Phillippa Carey:D
I love it.
It's written so simply, and i can see it like its a film being played in my head.
12/8/2008 c1 10dimethylmercury
Gosh! This is just brilliant! I think this would be a great prologue to something... great(: I think it would allow readers to understand more about the characters, like why is he unreadable and so guarded? But this was really a wonderful, concise(?) piece.
10dimethylmercuryGosh! This is just brilliant! I think this would be a great prologue to something... great(: I think it would allow readers to understand more about the characters, like why is he unreadable and so guarded? But this was really a wonderful, concise(?) piece.
12/8/2008 c1 6skydancersrule
Excellent.
A short and to-the-point review for a story with the same attributes. (:
6skydancersruleExcellent.
A short and to-the-point review for a story with the same attributes. (:
11/27/2008 c1 anonymous
it's so good i don't even know what to say. bravo.
it's so good i don't even know what to say. bravo.
11/27/2008 c1 3xHopeLesSdReaMeRx
Aww! How cute:) It's short and straight to the point but you got your message across.
3xHopeLesSdReaMeRxAww! How cute:) It's short and straight to the point but you got your message across.