for Eternal Climb2/7/2013 c1 
4swillia71688
This is one of the best poems I have read on this site. Your word choice and all is awesome!
4swillia71688This is one of the best poems I have read on this site. Your word choice and all is awesome!
4/3/2010 c1 5Penn Dalies
She is definitely determined to get to the top and will ignore sores and punctures to get there. It seems as though the hurts in life we feel; but with the strength of family and friends we push on and we keep climbing. Very Inspirational!
5Penn DaliesShe is definitely determined to get to the top and will ignore sores and punctures to get there. It seems as though the hurts in life we feel; but with the strength of family and friends we push on and we keep climbing. Very Inspirational!
10/20/2009 c1 40Mishua
I definitely liked the rhyming pattern.. it felt like the syllable count fell off the track at times, but then again, a poem's no good if all it does is sound like a metronome. Very good imagery, well-developed and excellent for describing life. My only question would be, what's at the end of the ladder? Or is that the question we can ask and never answer?
40MishuaI definitely liked the rhyming pattern.. it felt like the syllable count fell off the track at times, but then again, a poem's no good if all it does is sound like a metronome. Very good imagery, well-developed and excellent for describing life. My only question would be, what's at the end of the ladder? Or is that the question we can ask and never answer?
7/24/2009 c1 16Rocki Smith
I got hooked on the imagery in this. Not much I can put into words except... wow! I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of your poetry, as well as what you haven't written yet.
16Rocki SmithI got hooked on the imagery in this. Not much I can put into words except... wow! I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of your poetry, as well as what you haven't written yet.
5/22/2009 c1 46kyox88
short and rhyme! thats what i love about poetry, and thats what you are capable to write out! another lovely poem from you~i can feel you determination and eveything~~but the ending is liek abit hanging, maybe you should add in one more last line, maybe a line about where are you climbing to...an eternal heaven? who know~~nice one still!
46kyox88short and rhyme! thats what i love about poetry, and thats what you are capable to write out! another lovely poem from you~i can feel you determination and eveything~~but the ending is liek abit hanging, maybe you should add in one more last line, maybe a line about where are you climbing to...an eternal heaven? who know~~nice one still!
4/28/2009 c1 6Past Prototype
You should get these things published...the meaning in all of your poem's are amazing.
Even though she is faced with those raining against her...she keeps going throughout it all.
Such determination...
ja ne
6Past PrototypeYou should get these things published...the meaning in all of your poem's are amazing.
Even though she is faced with those raining against her...she keeps going throughout it all.
Such determination...
ja ne
4/21/2009 c1 91MyInspiration
I can picture you climbing this sky-high ladder in the darkness of a rainstorm!
"As the rain falls on my hood"
91MyInspirationI can picture you climbing this sky-high ladder in the darkness of a rainstorm!
"As the rain falls on my hood"
4/19/2009 c1 40Jareth the Monk
All right, haven't been on here in a few weeks, so I'm back. Good rhymes and the beat structure works, I think you should add a few stanzas about how the weather changes from one extreme to the other (blinding light and blistering heat, then bitter cold and snow, tranquility, etc.) and how it affects the climb (do we slip a few rungs in bad weather, or maybe tend to not do any climbing at all in good weather so we can take a break?). Its kind of like though the seasons change, life works the same, you can climb or fall, or merely sit still, but eventually the ladder will rot and tumble with or without you.
40Jareth the MonkAll right, haven't been on here in a few weeks, so I'm back. Good rhymes and the beat structure works, I think you should add a few stanzas about how the weather changes from one extreme to the other (blinding light and blistering heat, then bitter cold and snow, tranquility, etc.) and how it affects the climb (do we slip a few rungs in bad weather, or maybe tend to not do any climbing at all in good weather so we can take a break?). Its kind of like though the seasons change, life works the same, you can climb or fall, or merely sit still, but eventually the ladder will rot and tumble with or without you.
4/17/2009 c1 353Louis Denair
Nice metaphor of life, the way
things get harder and harder
as you reach your vintage years
but you should prevail.
Not sure about the everlasting
unless it's about humanity
in which case I'm not sure either
still, optimism is always prescribed
Great work.
353Louis DenairNice metaphor of life, the way
things get harder and harder
as you reach your vintage years
but you should prevail.
Not sure about the everlasting
unless it's about humanity
in which case I'm not sure either
still, optimism is always prescribed
Great work.
4/4/2009 c1 36words.for.you-DLS
This is very good and does a fine job of describing the subject and the image in my mind makes it even more real.
36words.for.you-DLSThis is very good and does a fine job of describing the subject and the image in my mind makes it even more real.
3/22/2009 c1 1tonight we bloom
Your imagery is so great and your writing will never cease to amaze me!
1tonight we bloomYour imagery is so great and your writing will never cease to amaze me!