for Oh Honey, I'm just not here3/8/2009 c1 
10Elephant-Artist
Very good imagery. Nice poem. I have nothing bad to say about it. Please read and review my stuff.
10Elephant-ArtistVery good imagery. Nice poem. I have nothing bad to say about it. Please read and review my stuff.
12/9/2008 c1 she smolders
The idea of December always puts me in a sad sort of mood and this poem really reminds me of that. I really love how you worked together mundane actions with the emotions in this poem and the overall tone is just bittersweet & beautiful. Take care.
The idea of December always puts me in a sad sort of mood and this poem really reminds me of that. I really love how you worked together mundane actions with the emotions in this poem and the overall tone is just bittersweet & beautiful. Take care.
12/1/2008 c1 91fairytale failure
I like how you connect what the car is doing (the steering wheel and the windshield wipers) to what you are thinking at the time; I especially liked the first three lines. One question - the last line says 'december's come and gone' - was it written a month in the future or almost a year in the past?
91fairytale failureI like how you connect what the car is doing (the steering wheel and the windshield wipers) to what you are thinking at the time; I especially liked the first three lines. One question - the last line says 'december's come and gone' - was it written a month in the future or almost a year in the past?