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12/6/2008 c9 23Jem the writer
I don't usually go for stories like this, but there you go!

I think you did a good job with the theme you've got going there. You've made it seem believable and realistic!

The only thing I think there is to improve on is the violence themes. Perhaps a bit more emotion conveyed into them would really make the reader /feel/.

Good job

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