for Southern Comfort10/5/2011 c14 
2Abrasive
I have to agree with LeenaAmara below - this is far from your best work. It's haphazard and confusing, with a number of spelling and grammatical errors early on. Most troubling is that the characters' reactions are often unrealistic or irrational, and conversations/dialogue between them sometimes makes no sense.
There's also a lack of clear growth from the main character. It's as if she takes one step forwards two steps back over and over and over. It gets tiring to read after a while.
The story has ahelluva lot of potential - great plotline, really - but it needs a substantial amount of editing.
2AbrasiveI have to agree with LeenaAmara below - this is far from your best work. It's haphazard and confusing, with a number of spelling and grammatical errors early on. Most troubling is that the characters' reactions are often unrealistic or irrational, and conversations/dialogue between them sometimes makes no sense.
There's also a lack of clear growth from the main character. It's as if she takes one step forwards two steps back over and over and over. It gets tiring to read after a while.
The story has ahelluva lot of potential - great plotline, really - but it needs a substantial amount of editing.
5/16/2010 c14 1TammyS3
You haven't updated in a while and I'm not sure how I found this story but I'd really like to keep reading anything you put up for this. So update soon! I really like your story.
1TammyS3You haven't updated in a while and I'm not sure how I found this story but I'd really like to keep reading anything you put up for this. So update soon! I really like your story.
1/17/2010 c14 sarcasm is my middle name
Omg, omg, omg ,omg! he kissed her! great story, love it... but tone down the self-sympathy and drama will ya?
Omg, omg, omg ,omg! he kissed her! great story, love it... but tone down the self-sympathy and drama will ya?
10/17/2009 c14 fvdsgdsgdslivejournalfriend
uhmayzing.
uhmayzing.
7/22/2009 c14 M
Oh it's just so wonderful! GREAT chapter! I simply cannot wait to see what else happens!
M
Oh it's just so wonderful! GREAT chapter! I simply cannot wait to see what else happens!
M
7/16/2009 c14 known
update! :[ i'm anxious.
update! :[ i'm anxious.
7/15/2009 c14 2kirstenb.0319
Oh my god, he kissed her? Please update soon and make her warm up to him a little.
2kirstenb.0319Oh my god, he kissed her? Please update soon and make her warm up to him a little.
7/13/2009 c14 treasure
bahaa. i can hardly wait for the next chapter. this story srsly blows my panties off. keep it up.
bahaa. i can hardly wait for the next chapter. this story srsly blows my panties off. keep it up.
7/11/2009 c14 JadeDream
ooh i was hoping he would do that soon! lol cant wait to read the next chapter, update soon!
ooh i was hoping he would do that soon! lol cant wait to read the next chapter, update soon!
7/9/2009 c14 18LeenaAmara
I like your work. I really do. But this is...not good. Sorry.
It's all over the place, the conversations are all over the place and don't make sense at all. I don't mean the words, I mean the reactions, the emotions. None of it.
It feels hastily written and unrealistic.
18LeenaAmaraI like your work. I really do. But this is...not good. Sorry.
It's all over the place, the conversations are all over the place and don't make sense at all. I don't mean the words, I mean the reactions, the emotions. None of it.
It feels hastily written and unrealistic.
6/10/2009 c13 2kirstenb.0319
Hey! I know the update has been long-awaited, but at least you got it out! I haven't updated my story in like three months so...yeah my readers probably have me torched on mental stakes or something. Anyway, nice update.
2kirstenb.0319Hey! I know the update has been long-awaited, but at least you got it out! I haven't updated my story in like three months so...yeah my readers probably have me torched on mental stakes or something. Anyway, nice update.
6/8/2009 c13 1the.5.elements
Awesome story! i have read all the chapters so far and have loved them all. Your description and characters are amazing =).
1the.5.elementsAwesome story! i have read all the chapters so far and have loved them all. Your description and characters are amazing =).
6/8/2009 c13 M
Great chapter! I'm so excited the story was updated! can'tw ait for the rest
Great chapter! I'm so excited the story was updated! can'tw ait for the rest